[stylist] poem submission

Mon Apr 2 18:45:31 UTC 2012

Barbara,
I am shocked to hear the date of July, 2010. I still had it on my list to
respond to.
This poem portrays in a searingly palpable way the pain, despair, yet hope,
that you have experienced. It is so beyond what any of us can have
experienced. 
With death, there is a resolve of sorts. You will forever have  feeling,
emotions and problems that cannot easily be resolved, in your boys as well
as yourself.
The last line of your poem, however, captures the beauty in each child that
you have been enabled to see.
This is such a multi-faceted poem that it is difficult to address all the
parts.  The basic metaphor is very effective. I like when you question why
you cannot turn the sand into beautiful glass. And I like the way you
describe your three sons as to their differences. 
There is a great deal to praise. I would hate to critique it for any
weaknesses in rhyme, or meter for  they are totally overshadowed by the
necessity for you to say this as you feel it. Any who read it will feel it,

It is well done. Your reference to poetry in your poem does not in fact
credit it or you with the fact that it is a primary healing art for you. 
As long as you keep writing, you will keep enlarging your own landscape.
Your skills will grow to reach the increasing distance in your sight.
Jackie

-----Original Message-----
From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
Behalf Of Barbara Hammel
Sent: Sunday, March 04, 2012 8:47 PM
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Subject: Re: [stylist] poem submission

And the reason they say that is it throws off the natural progression of 
life.  The older are always supposed to die before the younger.  The death 
of a child is also a tester of marriages.  I don't know what percent divorce

when it happens but it can put much strain.  So, too, does a handicapped 
child.  In the mid to late 80s, at the residential school I attended, only 
1/3 of the children came from two-parent homes.

Here's a poem I wrote in regards to this which would also fit the crying 
theme.

Barbara

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. -- Carl Sandburg
-----Original Message----- 
From: BradDunsé
Sent: Sunday, March 04, 2012 5:59 PM
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Jackie and others with a similar loss,

I watched the suffering my parents went through
with the loss of my brother. I never want to find
out, but the professionals in the world say there
is no greater greif than the loss of a child.

Brad

On 3/4/2012  05:24 PM Jacqueline Williams said...
>Brad,
>Thanks. That was a great summation of my poem. It was about the death of my
>middle son, found out 14 years after he disappeared in the Superstition
>Mountains.
>Incidentally, I loved your piece, Cry, Baby, Cry. I think it would make a
>great  song, but I am no song writer.
>Jackie
>
>
>-----Original Message-----
>From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
>Behalf Of Brad Dunsé
>Sent: Sunday, March 04, 2012 3:38 PM
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>
>Congrats Jackie. I like your poem. It summarizes:
>
>"Sometimes you really can't go around what you've
>got to go through, but you can always get through
>what seems impossible to get over"." --Capt'n Frank
>
>Brad
>
>
>On 3/4/2012  04:21 PM Jacqueline Williams said...
> >Brad,
> >You've got four.
> >I'm privileged to join Lynda, Myrna, and Shawn. I had two poems put in
> >"Arizona: 100 Years, 100 Poems, 100 Poets,"
> >In Honor of Arizona's 100th Year of Statehood.
> >You have all read the one called, "My Fingertips Braille You to Me, so I
> >will not attach that one. The other, Illusions of Farewell, is an
> >attachment. It might also qualify for Barbara's assignment for "crying."
> >Jackie
> >
> >-----Original Message-----
> >From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
> >Behalf Of Brad Dunsé
> >Sent: Friday, March 02, 2012 9:44 AM
> >To: Writer's Division Mailing List
> >Subject: Re: [stylist] poem submission
> >
> >We've got poems on the Writer's lisst publishing
> >auction block. I got a 3 anybody 4 imabiddin'4
> >anybody  give a 4.  I gotta 3 imabiddin'4
> >anbydoby biddin' for imabiddin'4 imabiddin'4?
> >I've got 3? I'm lookin gfor a 4? Going once? Going twice? ...
> >
> >Congrats!
> >
> >Brad
> >
> >
> >
> >On 3/2/2012  08:27 AM KajunCutie926 at aol.com said...
> > >And you can add me to the bubbly group.. My poem  'Clothe Me' will be
> > >appearing with you guys.  I am thrilled to say
> > >the  least and what fine company
> > >to be sharing it with!
> > >Myrna
> > >
> > >
> > >In a message dated 3/2/2012 8:24:58 A.M. Central Standard Time,
> > >llambert at zoominternet.net writes:
> > >
> > >I am  bubbling with ya. I got a note from Margaret two days ago - they
>are
> > >publishing my poem _Vilanelle for my Mother at Eighty_  so I will be
>there
> > >with ya!
> > >
> > >Lynda
> > >----- Original Message -----
> > >From:  "Jacobson, Shawn D" <Shawn.D.Jacobson at hud.gov>
> > >To: "'Writer's  Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> > >Sent: Friday, March 02,  2012 8:01 AM
> > >Subject: [stylist] poem submission
> > >
> > >
> > > > Dear  group.
> > > >
> > > > I believe I have some good news.  Recently, I sent  my poem, The
>Kraken
> > >at
> > > > Sunset, to Magnets and Ladders.  I got an  Email from their editor
> >saying
> > > > they like the topic and wanted to know  if they could make some 
> > > > minor
> > > > changes.  I said yes.  I  think that means they accepted my work. 
> > > > OK,
> > >I'm
> > > > thrilled and a  little bubbly.
> > > >
> > > > Shawn Jacobson
> > > > Mathematical  Statistician
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