[stylist] Humor excersize submission, dark humor, short play

[Eve Sanchez]

Wonderful! I think it would make a great movie with some work. I do not see
how, as Chris put it, that the baby went to a better home. The redneck was
at least caring for the baby. the second set of kidnappers immediately fed
the baby soda and were holding he baby in the front seat of a speeding car.
Yes of course the writing could improve and I am sure it has for you, but
the story is great. Keep up the imaginative thinking. Eve

On Tue, Apr 3, 2012 at 9:27 AM, Chris Kuell <ckuell at comcast.net> wrote:

> Hey Bernadetta,
>
> This is a dark comedy, indeed. There's really no other label. I have a
> feeling I'm going to be thinking about his for the rest of the day. I can't
> honestly say I loved it, not because the writing wasn't good, but just
> because of the nature of the piece. I mean, a baby gets stolen, twice, and
> while it may have wound up in a better home than the first one (we'll never
> know), it's still not a happy tale.
>
> How did your professor react to your writing in dialect? In general, I
> would warn people away from this. It's hard to do unless you are Mark
> Twain, and I'd leave it up to the actress. Having said that, you seem to do
> a fairly good job with it. I have to admit I'm also a little uncomfortable
> with the portrayal of the poor, ignorant Alabama redneck. Sure, I'm certain
> there are a lot of ignorant Alabama rednecks out there. But, it's still a
> bit of a stereotype. Yes, Faulkner and       Flannery O'Connor used them
> for their bread and butter, but they were Southerners and wrote in a time
> when that was more acceptable.
>
> I certainly didn't see the plot twist coming, and I'm a fan of believable,
> surprise endings. All in all, a good read. Thanks for sharing.
>
> chris
>
>
>
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