[stylist] House of Cards (Thank you Jackie & Lynda)

Tue Apr 17 00:31:54 UTC 2012

Thank you ladies for your kind words.  I enjoy  writing poetry that my 
readers can interpret in their own way as we all have  different experiences and 
perceptions.  In this case, it was written simply  from observations and 
conversations.  It can be interpreted to fit many  situations and that is a 
good thing.  
I am very humbled by your comments and  critiques.  Thank you so much for 
letting me know I 'got it  right'..
With kindest regard and very honored.. again thank  you.
Myrna

In a message dated 4/16/2012 5:10:33 P.M. Central Daylight Time,  
llambert at zoominternet.net writes:

Hi  Jackie,
Ditto works just fine.
I am not sure what I can do to send you  poems. If I put them in the body 
of 
the email, I think they become  scrambled. If you have an idea of how I can 
send something to you in a  different way, I will try it.

This "House of Cards" poem has stayed in  my mind since my first reading of 
it.  I knew nothing about how or  why it was written - but in analyzing it, 
I 
was able to discern the  tension and the remote viewing aspect of it very 
quickly.  I think it  is quite a successful poem on many levels.  It is 
exciting to me when  I  read some really good poems, or other works here on 
the Writer's  Division.

Lynda

Lynda Lambert
104 River  Road
Ellwood City, PA 16117

724 758 4979

My Blog:   http://www.walkingbyinnervision.blogspot.com
My Website:   http://lyndalambert.com

----- Original Message  ----- 
From: "Jacqueline Williams" <jackieleepoet at cox.net>
To:  "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
Sent: Monday,  April 16, 2012 5:45 PM
Subject: Re: [stylist] House of  Cards

> Lynda,
> I still have not written my critique of  House of Cards. After reading 
> yours,
> I am in awe of your  understanding of the content as my own understanding,
> and also in  accord so strongly with the flow and not forced aspect of 
this
>  difficult form. How can I just write a comment that says, "ditto?"
>  Incidentally, I still cannot open any of your attachments because e I 
>  cannot
> seem to open the conversion package. I have a friend who  graduates from
> university in another week with a computer major, and  he will help me. If
> not, Robert. I value your writings and  comments.
> Jackie
>
> -----Original Message-----
>  From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org]  On
> Behalf Of Lynda Lambert
> Sent: Wednesday, April 11, 2012  7:52 AM
> To: Writer's Division Mailing List
> Subject: Re:  [stylist] House of Cards
>
> Finally, I am trying to go back to  your poem and see what is there. Here 
> is
> where I am at with  it.
>
>
> Begins in third person - someone is telling the  story about "she" who was
> sheltered  and innocent, or in denial  of her situation -  living in a
> dangerous place that was about to  collapse her entire world.
>
> In the third stanza she is  described as alone - yet, soon we see that we 
> are
> made aware  that there are "others" who are there, and others who know 
dark
>  secrets. They are called "evil" and have overtaken innocence, and  
brought
> destruction or an end to earlier times when she felt safe and  happy - but
> she was deceived and never truly was safe or happy. All  appearances of
> domestic order are collapsing at this  point.
>
> The journey continues with "she" trying to recapture  things from the 
> past -
> yet they are illusive. She "picks" at  things, rooting about in the
> destruction - laughter is usually a  joyful idea, but not here. Here,
> laughter is really a kind of mocking  feeling that we get. Something that 
> is
> buried deep down  inside, yet being revealed.
>
> And, then we get to a change  towards the end.  Questions are asked, not
> particularly to the  reader, but questions one might ask oneself when 
being
> introspective.  The questions bring us deeper inside her thoughts as she 
is
> turning  over the questions, and she seems to be turning around slowly, 
>  away
> from the destruction we have been viewing.
>
>  Finally, we have the passage of time, when "time" is descrived as a 
>  being -
> with "muscles."  Time seems to be flesh and blood, and  brings with "it" 
> some
> distance.  While time has human  qualities, it is still neutral, and
> genderless. It is an  "it."
>
> In the concluding tercet, we are still in the past  tense, as we have been
> throughout the telling of the story. But there  is a new awareness and a
> knowing here, that leads the reader to have a  glimmer of hope in a 
> situation
> that seems to have been  on-going for a very long time.  There is no real
> changes that we  can tell in the outward situations, yet, we do have a 
> gentle
>  moving towards awareness that did not exist when the poem  began.
>
> I hope this is helpful to you! I enjoyed this poem very  much and it is
> really successful. You have given it a flow and an  elegance that is hard 
> to
> do with this form often times. There  is nothing forced here, and the 
parts
> all contribute to the whole of  this poem. Because the poem is written in
> past tense and third person,  there is a distance that we have. We have a
> God's eye view of the  person we are reading about. We view her from the
> distance as we read  her story.
>
> Well done!   Lynda
>
>
>
>
>
>
>
> Once  upon another time she lived
> In a fragile house of cards.   She  knew
> Only that she was sheltered, never heard
> The  winds of change that  silently
> Blew against the coated-paper  walls
> Of her blissful existence,  until it  crumpled.
>
> She remained quiet, not discussing her situation  with anyone - what would
> happen if she had shared the secrets she was  hiding inside the structure 
> of
> false  appearances?
>
>
>
> She found herself alone amid the  crumpled
> Ruins of the life she had  known, no longer  lived
> Behind the sanctity of sacred walls
> Which kept its   secrets.   Innocence knew
> It would die in shame,  silently
> Lying in  the ruins of her being.  Unheard.
>
> The Knave had claimed he heard
> No denial or  admonition and she  crumpled,
> Allowing the lifeless cards to fall  silently
> One by one.   In darkness lived
> The Kings  and Queens.  Only Innocence knew
> Evil  had shattered the  paper walls.
>
> She picked through discarded walls
>  Searching for treasured Innocence but  heard
> Only silence.   Laughter, she knew,
> Lay buried in the life now crumpled
> And  yet she survived.  She  lived
> To carry the secrets within  her silently.
>
> And time, in its fashion, ticked  silently
> Within her soul.  She  woke one day to find  walls
> Of Faith where debris once lived.
> Was that the   whisper of promise heard
> From beneath the dreams crumpled?
>  Could she  regain the life she once knew?
>
> Again, time  flexed its knowing muscle for it knew
> That some things must  be  borne silently
> And without reprieve.  The life lost in the   crumpled
> Ruins would not return to thrive within the walls
> Of  yesterday.  Truth's hammer clearly heard
> As it rang through  dreams not  lived.
>
> And in her soul she knew, that no  longer would walls
> Stand by silently,  ignoring the whispers  heard
> While the house crumpled, burying what once   lived.
>
>
> C March 2004
>
> Lynda  Lambert
> 104 River Road
> Ellwood City, PA 16117
>
>  724 758 4979
>
> My Blog:   http://www.walkingbyinnervision.blogspot.com
> My Website:   http://lyndalambert.com
>
>
>
>
>
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