[stylist] House of Cards (Thank you Shawn)
KajunCutie926 at aol.com
KajunCutie926 at aol.com
Thu Apr 19 16:26:17 UTC 2012
Thank you Shawn... this form can fry your brain...LOL I do appreciate
your kind words.. thank you again..)
Myrna
In a message dated 4/17/2012 7:58:47 A.M. Central Daylight Time,
Shawn.D.Jacobson at hud.gov writes:
Myrna
I finally got a chance to look at your poem, quite good.
Shawn
-----Original Message-----
From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
Behalf Of Lynda Lambert
Sent: Tuesday, April 17, 2012 8:03 AM
To: Writer's Division Mailing List
Subject: Re: [stylist] House of Cards (Thank you Jackie & Lynda)
Hi Myrna,
I made a copy and up it in a file, too!
Looking and listening, and then the weaving together of the tale - that is
what you did in a splendid way!
I hope you are putting your poems out for publication!
This is way too good to keep a secret. lol
Lynda
Lynda Lambert
104 River Road
Ellwood City, PA 16117
724 758 4979
My Blog: http://www.walkingbyinnervision.blogspot.com
My Website: http://lyndalambert.com
----- Original Message -----
From: <KajunCutie926 at aol.com>
To: <stylist at nfbnet.org>
Sent: Monday, April 16, 2012 8:31 PM
Subject: Re: [stylist] House of Cards (Thank you Jackie & Lynda)
> Thank you ladies for your kind words. I enjoy writing poetry that my
> readers can interpret in their own way as we all have different
> experiences and
> perceptions. In this case, it was written simply from observations and
> conversations. It can be interpreted to fit many situations and that
is
> a
> good thing.
> I am very humbled by your comments and critiques. Thank you so much for
> letting me know I 'got it right'..
> With kindest regard and very honored.. again thank you.
> Myrna
>
>
> In a message dated 4/16/2012 5:10:33 P.M. Central Daylight Time,
> llambert at zoominternet.net writes:
>
> Hi Jackie,
> Ditto works just fine.
> I am not sure what I can do to send you poems. If I put them in the body
> of
> the email, I think they become scrambled. If you have an idea of how I
> can
> send something to you in a different way, I will try it.
>
> This "House of Cards" poem has stayed in my mind since my first reading
> of
> it. I knew nothing about how or why it was written - but in analyzing
> it,
> I
> was able to discern the tension and the remote viewing aspect of it very
> quickly. I think it is quite a successful poem on many levels. It is
> exciting to me when I read some really good poems, or other works
here
> on
> the Writer's Division.
>
> Lynda
>
>
>
> Lynda Lambert
> 104 River Road
> Ellwood City, PA 16117
>
> 724 758 4979
>
> My Blog: http://www.walkingbyinnervision.blogspot.com
> My Website: http://lyndalambert.com
>
>
>
>
>
>
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "Jacqueline Williams" <jackieleepoet at cox.net>
> To: "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> Sent: Monday, April 16, 2012 5:45 PM
> Subject: Re: [stylist] House of Cards
>
>
>> Lynda,
>> I still have not written my critique of House of Cards. After reading
>> yours,
>> I am in awe of your understanding of the content as my own
>> understanding,
>> and also in accord so strongly with the flow and not forced aspect of
> this
>> difficult form. How can I just write a comment that says, "ditto?"
>> Incidentally, I still cannot open any of your attachments because e I
>> cannot
>> seem to open the conversion package. I have a friend who graduates from
>> university in another week with a computer major, and he will help me.
>> If
>> not, Robert. I value your writings and comments.
>> Jackie
>>
>> -----Original Message-----
>> From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org]
On
>> Behalf Of Lynda Lambert
>> Sent: Wednesday, April 11, 2012 7:52 AM
>> To: Writer's Division Mailing List
>> Subject: Re: [stylist] House of Cards
>>
>> Finally, I am trying to go back to your poem and see what is there.
Here
>> is
>> where I am at with it.
>>
>>
>> Begins in third person - someone is telling the story about "she" who
>> was
>> sheltered and innocent, or in denial of her situation - living in a
>> dangerous place that was about to collapse her entire world.
>>
>> In the third stanza she is described as alone - yet, soon we see that
we
>> are
>> made aware that there are "others" who are there, and others who know
> dark
>> secrets. They are called "evil" and have overtaken innocence, and
> brought
>> destruction or an end to earlier times when she felt safe and happy -
>> but
>> she was deceived and never truly was safe or happy. All appearances of
>> domestic order are collapsing at this point.
>>
>> The journey continues with "she" trying to recapture things from the
>> past -
>> yet they are illusive. She "picks" at things, rooting about in the
>> destruction - laughter is usually a joyful idea, but not here. Here,
>> laughter is really a kind of mocking feeling that we get. Something
that
>> is
>> buried deep down inside, yet being revealed.
>>
>> And, then we get to a change towards the end. Questions are asked, not
>> particularly to the reader, but questions one might ask oneself when
> being
>> introspective. The questions bring us deeper inside her thoughts as she
> is
>> turning over the questions, and she seems to be turning around slowly,
>> away
>> from the destruction we have been viewing.
>>
>> Finally, we have the passage of time, when "time" is descrived as a
>> being -
>> with "muscles." Time seems to be flesh and blood, and brings with "it"
>> some
>> distance. While time has human qualities, it is still neutral, and
>> genderless. It is an "it."
>>
>> In the concluding tercet, we are still in the past tense, as we have
>> been
>> throughout the telling of the story. But there is a new awareness and a
>> knowing here, that leads the reader to have a glimmer of hope in a
>> situation
>> that seems to have been on-going for a very long time. There is no
real
>> changes that we can tell in the outward situations, yet, we do have a
>> gentle
>> moving towards awareness that did not exist when the poem began.
>>
>> I hope this is helpful to you! I enjoyed this poem very much and it is
>> really successful. You have given it a flow and an elegance that is
hard
>> to
>> do with this form often times. There is nothing forced here, and the
> parts
>> all contribute to the whole of this poem. Because the poem is written
in
>> past tense and third person, there is a distance that we have. We have
a
>> God's eye view of the person we are reading about. We view her from the
>> distance as we read her story.
>>
>> Well done! Lynda
>>
>>
>>
>>
>>
>>
>>
>> Once upon another time she lived
>> In a fragile house of cards. She knew
>> Only that she was sheltered, never heard
>> The winds of change that silently
>> Blew against the coated-paper walls
>> Of her blissful existence, until it crumpled.
>>
>> She remained quiet, not discussing her situation with anyone - what
>> would
>> happen if she had shared the secrets she was hiding inside the
structure
>> of
>> false appearances?
>>
>>
>>
>> She found herself alone amid the crumpled
>> Ruins of the life she had known, no longer lived
>> Behind the sanctity of sacred walls
>> Which kept its secrets. Innocence knew
>> It would die in shame, silently
>> Lying in the ruins of her being. Unheard.
>>
>> The Knave had claimed he heard
>> No denial or admonition and she crumpled,
>> Allowing the lifeless cards to fall silently
>> One by one. In darkness lived
>> The Kings and Queens. Only Innocence knew
>> Evil had shattered the paper walls.
>>
>> She picked through discarded walls
>> Searching for treasured Innocence but heard
>> Only silence. Laughter, she knew,
>> Lay buried in the life now crumpled
>> And yet she survived. She lived
>> To carry the secrets within her silently.
>>
>> And time, in its fashion, ticked silently
>> Within her soul. She woke one day to find walls
>> Of Faith where debris once lived.
>> Was that the whisper of promise heard
>> From beneath the dreams crumpled?
>> Could she regain the life she once knew?
>>
>> Again, time flexed its knowing muscle for it knew
>> That some things must be borne silently
>> And without reprieve. The life lost in the crumpled
>> Ruins would not return to thrive within the walls
>> Of yesterday. Truth's hammer clearly heard
>> As it rang through dreams not lived.
>>
>> And in her soul she knew, that no longer would walls
>> Stand by silently, ignoring the whispers heard
>> While the house crumpled, burying what once lived.
>>
>>
>> C March 2004
>>
>> Lynda Lambert
>> 104 River Road
>> Ellwood City, PA 16117
>>
>> 724 758 4979
>>
>> My Blog: http://www.walkingbyinnervision.blogspot.com
>> My Website: http://lyndalambert.com
>>
>>
>>
>>
>>
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