[stylist] Poem: Inspiration

[Lynda Lambert]

Hi Donna,
Yes, the subject and verb are one line that is complete in itself.   "I 
know" is intentional and essential, marks a shift of thought/time.  (my 
post-modernist tendencies).

----- Original Message ----- 
From: "Donna Hill" <penatwork at epix.net>
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Sent: Wednesday, February 08, 2012 4:05 PM
Subject: Re: [stylist] Poem: Inspiration


> Lynda,
> Nice whimsical poem and I like the surprise ending. I would agree that the
> last line is a bit week,. Maybe "He grabbed ..." or something else a bit
> less passive. I thought about the comment about "I know" being present 
> tense
> while everything else is past, and I wondered if "I realized ..." would
> work, but ended up thinking that I liked "I know" better. Usually, it's 
> hard
> to tell what format poetry was supposed to be in because the e-mail seems 
> to
> add and subtract line breaks at will, but in this case, it looks to me 
> like
> you meant the subject and verb to stand alone with the rest of the thought
> following on the next line.
> Donna
>
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> Behalf Of Lynda Lambert
> Sent: Wednesday, February 08, 2012 10:32 AM
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> Subject: [stylist] Poem: Inspiration
>
> Thinking of SPRING during a late winter snowfall in PA. Here's a poem
> looking ahead to Spring mornings.
>
>
> "Inspiration Arrived Early This Morning"
>
>
> I pressed
>
> my feet deeper into plush blue blankets
>
>
>
> I stretched
>
> my resting body and flexed my heels
>
>
>
> I looked
>
> slowly at the neon green numbers on the bedside clock
>
>
>
> I remembered
>
> it's the first Sunday morning of Spring!
>
>
>
> I know
>
> the rising sun can never be seen through a window that faces west
>
>
> I listened
>
> to the morning bird songs drifting into the room
>
>
>
> I thought
>
> about giving a gift to my lover this morning
>
>
>
> I decided
>
> it must be a divine offering fit for the gods
>
>
>
> I remembered
>
> the shiny silver box in the next room
>
>
>
> I  arose
>
> to get the magical surprise I would bring to him this morning
>
>
>
> I brought
>
> the gift. It was pure inspiration
>
>
>
> I lifted
>
> his warm arm - pushed the cool slender box under it
>
>
>
> He saw
>
> the new box of Cracker Jacks tucked under his arm.
>
>
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>
>
> **************************
>
>
>
> Lynda Lambert
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