[stylist] Phases of the Moon

Sat Feb 25 01:22:43 UTC 2012

I give you permission to to all 8!  lol

 ----- Original Message ----- 
From: "vejas" <brlsurfer at gmail.com>
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Sent: Friday, February 24, 2012 8:02 PM
Subject: Re: [stylist] Phases of the Moon

>I believe there are like 8 phases of the moon.  This is what I remember:
> new moon
> waxing gibbus
> waxing crescent
> half moon
>
>
>
> waning crescent
> waning gibbus
> full moon
> last quarter
> I think, but you can look it up.  What I mean is, there are 8 phases so 
> you should probably do 8, not 3.
> Vejas
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "Jacqueline Williams" <jackieleepoet at cox.net
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> Date sent: Fri, 24 Feb 2012 17:52:38 -0700
> Subject: Re: [stylist] Phases of the Moon
>
> Lynda,
> Here goes.
> Do you mean for the title to mean Phase of the Moon, or Phases of the 
> Moon.
> Since the poem is in three stanzas, I surmise you mean the latter instead 
> of
> the singular.
> Since it is to Sappho, and I suffer from having a very literal mind, I 
> used
> all the information on her to give me clues to understanding this poem-a
> Greek poet, whose remnants of poetry survive in libraries in Greece, and
> other places.  Thus a possible explanation of the two shy librarians.
> Also, there is the speculation that she was       a lesbian, coming from
> Lesbos.  The two shy librarians are Certainly Sappho held enough words to
> write an epic poem for she was very prolific.  The other, fearful, could 
> have
> been in fear of being revealed as Sappho's companion.
> Certainly Sappho slid around time, and the variety of "neighbors she had 
> in
> the fifth and sixth centuries B.C.
> Also, Vegans first made themselves known at this same time.  Not having to 
> do
> with health, but because they objected morally to the use of animals for
> food.  They were believed by Vegans to have equal standing as human beings 
> as
> far as rights.  That is the only meaning I can find for having that line 
> in
> the poem, other than the dog is black which fits the mood of the sky.
> The phrase, "swaddled around" seems like it should "swaddled by" instead. 
> It
> seems like the lunar field would be wrapped around the shadows.
> I love the first stanza.  It gives a vivid visual picture of this night. 
> I do
> question whether you need three adjectives to describe the night.  I love
> "reluctant" and the other two are equally descriptive, but would not just
> one of those be enough to go with reluctant?
> I shall think of a wounded moon, double red, in the future when I look at
> the sky, and see the slight subordinate branches holding something.  Even
> though I cannot see.
> Wonderful language.
> Does the Vegan walk his black dog mean he is an audience for the poet when
> she writes with her neon lipstick?  Sunspots can have a double meaning. 
> The
> Cosmos, or aging skin.  For your poem, I am assuming the cosmos.
> For the larger meaning, I am not sure.  I might think that it is about a
> wildly imaginative woman who has been wounded, but makes beauty take the
> place of hurt by sliding around doors  she  may have found closed to her
> over time.
> Am I even close to your meaning?
> You have a period after the word, "illustrations" yet it is followed  by
> lowered case, "on."
> I am a fan of m-dashes, and I see you have used dashes like Emily 
> Dickenson.
>
> I have never been particularly good at critiquing, but when I really take
> time, I find I learn much.
> I suspect you have an MFA.  Am I correct?
> And this is what I must learn from.
> Jackie
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
> Behalf Of Lynda Lambert
> Sent: Wednesday, February 22, 2012 5:56 PM
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> Subject: Re: [stylist] Phases of the Moon
>
> Hi Jacquelin,
> Here is the poem I have been working on for a few days.  It is in three
> phases so I hope it comes through ok for you to read.  NO rhyming.
>
> Phase of the Moon
>
>    (to Sappho)
>
>
>
> Wounded - on a dark, late, reluctant night
>
> double red Crescent  Moon, hiding  something
>
> beyond the slight, subordinate branches  -
>
> She slides  around time-painted neighborhood doors..
>
>
>
>
>
> Two shy Irish librarians have stopped
>
> One  holds enough words to write an epic poem.
>
> The second one stands in silent fear .
>
> of shadows  swaddled  around the  lunar  field.
>
>
>
>
>
> A vegan acquaintance walks his black dog tonight-
>
> when  a poet  writes illusions.on night skies
>
> reaching up - applies her bright neon  lipstick.
>
> She motions and  the years chase away sunspots
>
>
>
> **********************************
>
>
>
> Lynda Lambert
>
> February 20, 2012
>
> Copyright:  All rights reserved.
>
>
>
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "Jacqueline Williams" <jackieleepoet at cox.net
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> Sent: Wednesday, February 22, 2012 4:36 PM
> Subject: Re: [stylist] Phases of the Moon
>
>
> Linda,
> Yes, if you are willing to chance changes in line length, I would love to
> read your poem.  Some are so dependent on this factor.
> If it is a rhymed poem I can often adjust the lines myself.  Sometimes if
> there is a great discrepancy in the length reading line by line, I can
> also
> guess at the line break.  And sometimes, regardless, it flows from
> beginning
> to end.
> Thank you for sharing.
> Jackie
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
> Behalf Of Lynda Lambert
> Sent: Wednesday, February 22, 2012 7:18 AM
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> Subject: Re: [stylist] Phases of the Moon
>
> I use msword7.
> I can send it enclosed in the message, but not sure it it changes the
> format...let me know and I will be glad to email it to you if you like.
> And, I love your thinking process, too!
>
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "Jacqueline Williams" <jackieleepoet at cox.net
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> Sent: Tuesday, February 21, 2012 8:57 PM
> Subject: Re: [stylist] Phases of the Moon
>
>
> Linda,
> I have to download a kind of pac to be able to open your attachment.  It
> is
> because I have an older version of Word.  I don't know why this makes me
> nervous, but I have an old laptop and things often get messed up.
> I am sorry I cannot read your "Moon" poem at this time.  Perhaps I can
> send
> this e-mail to my new computer with all the upgrades when I start to
> learn
> how to use the new operating system.
> I love your thinking process.
> Jackie
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
> Behalf Of Lynda Lambert
> Sent: Monday, February 20, 2012 1:03 PM
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> Subject: [stylist] Phases of the Moon
>
> I want to share a poem I have been working on for a couple of days.  I
> attached it as a word document for more clarity.
>
> This poem?  It comsumes me - I get up late at night, turn my computer
> back
> on, so I can work some more.  Move things around, change some words,
> inject
> meaning, take away what is "too much."
>
> Writing a poem is like a construction worker.  We gather up information,
> haul
> it away in a turck, and take it from one construction site to the next.
> We
> build it; we tear it apart; we build again; and tear it down once more.
> And,
> on it goes.  Each time we destroy or move things, it creates something
> that
> is new.  We "construct" meaning through "deconstructing" it.  It is hard
> work.
> I am still working on this one.
>
> The Irish librarians were a big surprise to me this afternoon as I
> worked.
> And, this poem taught me so many new things about the phases of the moon
> and
> the meaning of a new tube of lipstick.  lol
>
> I have absolutely NO idea when I begin, where we are going.  I begin with
> a
> few words, ideas, and we go from there.  It is an exciting journey.  When 
> I
> had started this one, I had no idea who would be "showing up" to
> participate
> in it.  One by one, they come.
>
>
> Lynda
>
> Lynda Lambert
> 104 River Road
> Ellwood City, PA 16117
>
> 724 758 4979
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> My Blog:  http://www.walkingbyinnervision.blogspot.com
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