[stylist] Phases of the Moon

Sat Feb 25 01:02:25 UTC 2012

I believe there are like 8 phases of the moon.  This is what I 
remember:
new moon
waxing gibbus
waxing crescent
half moon

 waning crescent
waning gibbus
full moon
last quarter
I think, but you can look it up.  What I mean is, there are 8 
phases so you should probably do 8, not 3.
Vejas
----- Original Message -----
From: "Jacqueline Williams" <jackieleepoet at cox.net
To: "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org
Date sent: Fri, 24 Feb 2012 17:52:38 -0700
Subject: Re: [stylist] Phases of the Moon

Lynda,
Here goes.
Do you mean for the title to mean Phase of the Moon, or Phases of 
the Moon.
Since the poem is in three stanzas, I surmise you mean the latter 
instead of
the singular.
Since it is to Sappho, and I suffer from having a very literal 
mind, I used
all the information on her to give me clues to understanding this 
poem-a
Greek poet, whose remnants of poetry survive in libraries in 
Greece, and
other places.  Thus a possible explanation of the two shy 
librarians.
Also, there is the speculation that she was       a lesbian, 
coming from
Lesbos.  The two shy librarians are Certainly Sappho held enough 
words to
write an epic poem for she was very prolific.  The other, 
fearful, could have
been in fear of being revealed as Sappho's companion.
Certainly Sappho slid around time, and the variety of "neighbors 
she had in
the fifth and sixth centuries B.C.
Also, Vegans first made themselves known at this same time.  Not 
having to do
with health, but because they objected morally to the use of 
animals for
food.  They were believed by Vegans to have equal standing as 
human beings as
far as rights.  That is the only meaning I can find for having 
that line in
the poem, other than the dog is black which fits the mood of the 
sky.
The phrase, "swaddled around" seems like it should "swaddled by" 
instead.  It
seems like the lunar field would be wrapped around the shadows.
I love the first stanza.  It gives a vivid visual picture of this 
night.  I do
question whether you need three adjectives to describe the night.  
I love
"reluctant" and the other two are equally descriptive, but would 
not just
one of those be enough to go with reluctant?
I shall think of a wounded moon, double red, in the future when I 
look at
the sky, and see the slight subordinate branches holding 
something.  Even
though I cannot see.
Wonderful language.
Does the Vegan walk his black dog mean he is an audience for the 
poet when
she writes with her neon lipstick?  Sunspots can have a double 
meaning.  The
Cosmos, or aging skin.  For your poem, I am assuming the cosmos.
For the larger meaning, I am not sure.  I might think that it is 
about a
wildly imaginative woman who has been wounded, but makes beauty 
take the
place of hurt by sliding around doors  she  may have found closed 
to her
over time.
Am I even close to your meaning?
You have a period after the word, "illustrations" yet it is 
followed  by
lowered case, "on."
I am a fan of m-dashes, and I see you have used dashes like Emily 
Dickenson.

I have never been particularly good at critiquing, but when I 
really take
time, I find I learn much.
I suspect you have an MFA.  Am I correct?
And this is what I must learn from.
Jackie

-----Original Message-----
From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org 
[mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
Behalf Of Lynda Lambert
Sent: Wednesday, February 22, 2012 5:56 PM
To: Writer's Division Mailing List
Subject: Re: [stylist] Phases of the Moon

Hi Jacquelin,
Here is the poem I have been working on for a few days.  It is in 
three
phases so I hope it comes through ok for you to read.  NO 
rhyming.

Phase of the Moon

    (to Sappho)

Wounded - on a dark, late, reluctant night

double red Crescent  Moon, hiding  something

beyond the slight, subordinate branches  -

She slides  around time-painted neighborhood doors..

Two shy Irish librarians have stopped

One  holds enough words to write an epic poem.

The second one stands in silent fear .

of shadows  swaddled  around the  lunar  field.

A vegan acquaintance walks his black dog tonight-

when  a poet  writes illusions.on night skies

reaching up - applies her bright neon  lipstick.

She motions and  the years chase away sunspots

 **********************************

Lynda Lambert

February 20, 2012

----- Original Message -----
From: "Jacqueline Williams" <jackieleepoet at cox.net
To: "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org
Sent: Wednesday, February 22, 2012 4:36 PM
Subject: Re: [stylist] Phases of the Moon

 Linda,
 Yes, if you are willing to chance changes in line length, I 
would love to
 read your poem.  Some are so dependent on this factor.
 If it is a rhymed poem I can often adjust the lines myself.  
Sometimes if
 there is a great discrepancy in the length reading line by line, 
I can
 also
 guess at the line break.  And sometimes, regardless, it flows 
from
 beginning
 to end.
 Thank you for sharing.
 Jackie

 -----Original Message-----
 From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org 
[mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
 Behalf Of Lynda Lambert
 Sent: Wednesday, February 22, 2012 7:18 AM
 To: Writer's Division Mailing List
 Subject: Re: [stylist] Phases of the Moon

 I use msword7.
 I can send it enclosed in the message, but not sure it it 
changes the
 format...let me know and I will be glad to email it to you if 
you like.
 And, I love your thinking process, too!

 ----- Original Message -----
 From: "Jacqueline Williams" <jackieleepoet at cox.net
 To: "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org
 Sent: Tuesday, February 21, 2012 8:57 PM
 Subject: Re: [stylist] Phases of the Moon

 Linda,
 I have to download a kind of pac to be able to open your 
attachment.  It
 is
 because I have an older version of Word.  I don't know why this 
makes me
 nervous, but I have an old laptop and things often get messed 
up.
 I am sorry I cannot read your "Moon" poem at this time.  Perhaps 
I can
 send
 this e-mail to my new computer with all the upgrades when I 
start to
 learn
 how to use the new operating system.
 I love your thinking process.
 Jackie

 -----Original Message-----
 From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org 
[mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
 Behalf Of Lynda Lambert
 Sent: Monday, February 20, 2012 1:03 PM
 To: Writer's Division Mailing List
 Subject: [stylist] Phases of the Moon

 I want to share a poem I have been working on for a couple of 
days.  I
 attached it as a word document for more clarity.

 This poem?  It comsumes me - I get up late at night, turn my 
computer
 back
 on, so I can work some more.  Move things around, change some 
words,
 inject
 meaning, take away what is "too much."

 Writing a poem is like a construction worker.  We gather up 
information,
 haul
 it away in a turck, and take it from one construction site to 
the next.
 We
 build it; we tear it apart; we build again; and tear it down 
once more.
 And,
 on it goes.  Each time we destroy or move things, it creates 
something
 that
 is new.  We "construct" meaning through "deconstructing" it.  It 
is hard
 work.
 I am still working on this one.

 The Irish librarians were a big surprise to me this afternoon as 
I
 worked.
 And, this poem taught me so many new things about the phases of 
the moon
 and
 the meaning of a new tube of lipstick.  lol

 I have absolutely NO idea when I begin, where we are going.  I 
begin with
 a
 few words, ideas, and we go from there.  It is an exciting 
journey.  When I
 had started this one, I had no idea who would be "showing up" to
 participate
 in it.  One by one, they come.

 Lynda

 Lynda Lambert
 104 River Road
 Ellwood City, PA 16117

 724 758 4979

 My Blog:  http://www.walkingbyinnervision.blogspot.com
 My Website:  http://lyndalambert.com

 _______________________________________________
 Writers Division web site:
 http://www.nfb-writers-division.net
 <http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/

 stylist mailing list
 stylist at nfbnet.org
 http://nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
 To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account 
info for
 stylist:

http://nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/llambert%40z
oominternet
 .net

 _______________________________________________
 Writers Division web site:
 http://www.nfb-writers-division.net 
<http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/

 stylist mailing list
 stylist at nfbnet.org
 http://nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
 To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account 
info for
 stylist:

http://nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/jackieleepoe
t%40cox.net

 _______________________________________________
 Writers Division web site:
 http://www.nfb-writers-division.net 
<http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/

 stylist mailing list
 stylist at nfbnet.org
 http://nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
 To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account 
info for
 stylist:

http://nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/llambert%40z
oominternet
.net

_______________________________________________
Writers Division web site:
http://www.nfb-writers-division.net 
<http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/

stylist mailing list
stylist at nfbnet.org
http://nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info 
for
stylist:
http://nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/jackieleepoe
t%40cox.net

_______________________________________________
Writers Division web site:
http://www.nfb-writers-division.net 
<http://www.nfb-writers-division.org/

stylist mailing list
stylist at nfbnet.org
http://nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info 
for stylist:
http://nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/brlsurfer%40
gmail.com