[stylist] king peeley and the integra tea (changes prompt)

Tue Jan 17 06:16:13 UTC 2012

Hey Robert,
Maybe it's that it summarizes more what happens to the characters 
than actually making the characters come alive as much as it 
should? Like, there isn't much interaction between Queen Amina 
and her children, it more just summarizes what's happened with 
them.
I guess?

 By the way, I got an 85-not my best-on the folk-tale.  There was 
stuff like clothes which I wouldn't have normally put but had to 
put for the requirements.  I'm thinking I may have done better if 
it had been my English teacher.  That's what makes me weird.  
There's a camel diary thing I had to do in seventh grade also, 
and I was so entranced in the characters and writing it that I 
forgot to put in the beginning about the camel's features that  
is has a hump, which is, like so basic.  I can send it here if 
you're interested, but you may need to keep track of NAMES.  (one 
of my main weaknesses)
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From: "Donna Hill" <penatwork at epix.net
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Hey Vejas,
Donna Hill here.  There is a lot of literature from a long time 
ago that is
as realistic as anything written nowadays.  People are pretty 
much the same
throughout the ages.  They may have different things in their 
environments,
but the basic human emotions and struggles are constant 
throughout history.
Whether it's the Bible, Homer's Iliad and Odyssey, the Old 
English poem
Beowulf or the Dickens and Twain novels of the 19th century, 
something
always rings true for modern readers.  I guess this is my way of 
saying that
I think you should give Robert's question another think, and 
don't use the
setting of your story as an excuse.
Donna

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I guess cuz it takes place a long time ago, the characters may
not be as realistic?
Vchjas

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From: "Robert Leslie Newman" <newmanrl at cox.net
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Young mister V
RE: a challenge

You are a very creative thinker.  Your story about king  Peeley
is a story
more about a story, rather then a story that happens in real time
with
characters moving, breathing and doing what you say they did.
What do you
think I mean? (I'm one of your biggest fans)

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Sent: Saturday, January 14, 2012 9:58 AM
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Subject: [stylist] king peeley and the integra tea (changes
prompt)

This story has to do more with personality change.  Since I have
lots going
on, I don't have time to make a new one.  I wrote this in seventh
grade for
social studies and expanded upon it.
Suggestions for changes to the writing are more than welcome.
Vejas
PS I think my personality change might be a bit unrealistic.
Bridgit, feel free to comment to the list.

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