[stylist] Changes poem, Shawn
Jacobson, Shawn D
Shawn.D.Jacobson at hud.gov
Fri Jan 20 14:48:02 UTC 2012
Thanks to all who looked over my poem. I'm glad you liked it.
Kris, thanks for the word check; guess I've been reading too many books in audio and not enough in print/Braille.
Shawn
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From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of Chris Kuell
Sent: Wednesday, January 18, 2012 9:39 PM
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Subject: Re: [stylist] Changes poem, Shawn
Hey Shawn,
I like this poem a lot. I believe the formatting got screwed up by the time
it looped the earth a few times and landed on my desktop, but I can imagine
where I'd/you'd put the line breaks and it reads very well. I like that you
never tell the reader that it's a roller-coaster (and I'm going to look
stupid if it isn't) and the narrator is at an amusement park. The only
correction I'd make is to use descent (d e s c e n t) instead of decent.
Thanks for sharing.
chris
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