[stylist] Sample of writing

Sun Jul 1 18:18:58 UTC 2012

Yes, Jackie, I agree, it is like being sucked into a vortex, never ending, 
and constant turns.  It also reminds me of the psychological effects of a 
person who is caught up in a relationship that is very dangerous - with one 
of the people holding power of the other, such as with a person who has been 
held captive to another. One is able to manipulate and control a weaker one 
who is captive and lacks the ability to get out of the toxic relationship. 
It is haunting, and reminds me of Sylvia Plath's work very much.

Lynda

----- Original Message ----- 
From: "Jacqueline Williams" <jackieleepoet at cox.net>
To: "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
Sent: Sunday, July 01, 2012 1:52 PM
Subject: Re: [stylist] Sample of writing

> Michelle,
> This is quite a love poem. It leaves little of total despair unturned.
> It reminds me of a Black Hole, wherein another celestial object bounces 
> off
> of its outer part, or gets stuck and goes deeper and deeper to never be 
> its
> own entity again.
> You have described this non-existence vividly except for the one emotion 
> you
> say you still have, anger. If you are totally devoid of feeling, you would
> not have anger which is a very strong feeling and is known to save people
> from utter despair or nothingness.
> I think writing a love poem is extremely difficult because there has been
> little unsaid in a myriad of ways.
> You have succeeded in doing so in an original way.
> I look forward to more of your poetry, and also your fiction.
> Jackie
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
> Behalf Of Michelle
> Sent: Wednesday, June 27, 2012 7:00 PM
> To: 'Writer's Division Mailing List'
> Subject: Re: [stylist] Sample of writing
>
>
> Hi all, Robert has invited me to the list and I will be at National
> Convention as well. I'm Michelle from PA and here is a sample of my 
> poetry.
> I write fiction as well.
> Critique welcome.
> Michelle
>
>
>
>
>
> THE ONE I Love
> By: Michelle Sipe
>
>
> Promises, echoes, memories cast into a dreamscape.
> Yet, here I lie awake.
> Shadows dance upon the wall, like great giants poised to fall.
> Yet, no fear comes to fill my empty heart.
> Outside the wind blows across the grass, silvered moonlight lights its 
> path.
> Yet, I do not go out there, I do not dare.
> A million stars like priceless gems, oh to be one of them.
> Here I lie, too hollow even for despair, and yet, I am not scared.
> And, what is fear?
> A thick and cloying fragrance?
> A heady drug of circumstance?
> Yet, I don't care, anger has gone and taken all I ever had.
> Anger, what do I do with it?
> It poisons and steals and cuts to the quick.
> There is a hole inside where my heart once lived.
> Or, is it there, dormant, hidden, waiting?
> And, yet, I am not well.
> I'm an unused space, a burnt out hollow shell.
> What sends me sliding down that slope?
> The loss of him, the one I love.
> He turned away and took all hope.
> Too dead to care, too blind to see just what his love has done to me.
> Yet, I feel nothing.
> And, yet, again and again, I ask for nothing more.
> I will not sleep, I cannot dream of him again.
> He's gone and he's stripped my soul to bare, dead bones.
> And yet, he doesn't know.
> Evil, laughing twist of fate.
> Wicked and wicked and so many kinds of wicked.
> There's nothing left in me to break.
> Licking flames of scorn and shame, even their greedy tongues do not hurt 
> me.
> There is nothing left, he took the best of me.
> I am no longer the person I used to be.
> She is dead and gone with him, the one I love.
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
> Behalf Of Robert Leslie Newman
> Sent: Tuesday, June 26, 2012 7:57 PM
> To: 'Writer's Division Mailing List'
> Subject: Re: [stylist] Awards
>
> Jackie
>
> That was a great worm story! I enjoyed the perspective, informative, yet
> sensitive. It makes a reader wonder if it was the result of some special 
> set
> of CDs, or God forbid, by emersion learning. Anyway, congrads!
>
> (I'm getting primed for the Writers' Division's annual meeting in Dallas.
> Our guest speaker is a comedy writer.)
>
>
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On
> Behalf Of Jacqueline Williams
> Sent: Tuesday, June 26, 2012 11:26 AM
> To: 'Writer's Division Mailing List'
> Subject: [stylist] Awards
>
> I am truly a happy camper today, and forgive me if I blow my own horn a 
> bit.
>
> I just received five awards through the mail yesterday from the NFSPS 2012
> Annual Contest. It stands for the National Federation of State Poetry
> Societies.
>
> None of them were a first, second, or third place, which means no money, 
> but
> there was a 1st, 2nd, one 5th, and two 7th place Honorable Mentions.
>
> I have recently attached two of these to my e-mails to you. Medicine 
> Wheel,
> which was "Our American Indian Heritage Award,  and "Rocky", which was on
> the topic of When bad things happen.
>
> I will only burden you with one attachment. Mainly because I thought it 
> was
> hilarious that it got an award. It was from the League of Minnesota Poets
> Award, and the category of long free verse.
>
> In it, I have taken the name of an angle worm. Who asked me about
> anthropomorphic poems? Not sure this is one, but I was trying also to
> portray the voice of one dead, a Spoon River.
>
> The bright spot is that with an honorable mention, I can submit the poem
> again with the confidence that it is a good one that might be in need of a
> tweak or two.
>
> In only one of the five were the judge's comments included. In her remarks
> she stressed the importance of not having even one error in spelling,
> punctuation, or usage. In her category there were 257 poems, and every one
> with even one error was automatically discarded because it was so 
> difficult
> to winnow out even the ones with  perfect form, so that she could
> concentrate on content, form, etc.
>
> It is doubly difficult when you use a screen reader to accomplish this, as 
> I
> am sure you all know. But I would encourage you to try.
>
> If anyone wants the information on next year's contest, I will be scanning
> it for myself, and could make an attachment. The problems, the scanner 
> often
> makes mistakes in spelling or skipping some things.
>
> Sorry I missed the phone conference on Sunday. As Lynda has said, personal
> contact means a great deal.
>
> Jackie
>
>
>
>
>
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