[stylist] please jell me if this is a good poem

Tue May 1 23:03:49 UTC 2012

Wow, I thought it was an Hispanic surname (unknown meaning). Is the
pronunciation still as I suspected then? vae-haus? I think things like this
show how small our world truly is. :) Eve

On Tue, May 1, 2012 at 4:20 PM, vejas <brlsurfer at gmail.com> wrote:

> Hi Eve,
> Vejas is my real name, it's a Lithuanian name meaning "wind."
>
> Vejas
>
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: Eve Sanchez <3rdeyeonly at gmail.com
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>  Date sent: Mon, 30 Apr 2012 22:22:17 -0600
> Subject: Re: [stylist] please jell me if this is a good poem
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> Vejas, i am glad to hear your teacher liked it.  You are only in the first
> steps of your climb and will keep getting better and better.  Next  year
> they will expect more of you (and so on and so on) and you will be prepared
> for your writing will do nothing but improve as you continue to work at it
> and read, read, read.  Can I ask you something? If you do not want to
> answer cuz of this public forum or anything I will understand, but what is
> your first name? Just curious as to whom I am talking to.  :) Eve
>
> On Mon, Apr 30, 2012 at 9:34 PM, vejas <brlsurfer at gmail.com> wrote:
>
> Eve,
> I turned in my poetry project today.  (I'm in ninth grade.) Yes, my
> teacher good like x; she said that it filled all of the requirements.
> Vejas
>
>
>
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: Eve Sanchez <3rdeyeonly at gmail.com
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> Date sent: Mon, 23 Apr 2012 21:30:32 -0600
> Subject: Re: [stylist] please jell me if this is a good poem
>
> I will be honest and say that I know nothing about poetry, but the subject
> matter here interests me.  I see this mother as a cruel woman that reminds
> me of many past clients and parents of clients.  Her 'lecture' is more of a
> taunting passive aggressive act than anything else.  Good luck.  Let us
> know
> what your teacher thinks will you? And what grade are you in? Just curious.
> Eve
>
> On Mon, Apr 23, 2012 at 5:16 PM, vejas <brlsurfer at gmail.com> wrote:
>
> Hi,
> For school I have to write a Shakesperian sonnet.  Our teacher said we
> didn't have to do it in iambic pentameter, but that we had to have the
> rhyming in an about-about-could-could-ef-ef-******gg fashion.
>
>
> I wrote this poem and it's supposed to be about a mother lecting her son.
>  But I think it sort of drifts.  Please tell me your opinion.
>
> Why didn't you do the many chores,
> That you were supposed to do last night?
> I've told you, for quite a few scores,
> That you just have to fix the light.
> Your laziness is such a curse...
> Do you realize what you could've had?
>
> Yes, it could have been much worse,
> If it weren't for me and your dad.
> Why, yes, you were adopted out,
> When you were just a little boy,
> But really it was, without a doubt,
> A life you would not have enjoyed.
> Just know I want the best,
> Now go to sleep and rest.
> Thanks for comments.
> Vejas
>
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