[stylist] Commas and semi-colons

[Bridgit Pollpeter]

A little info on using semi-colons and commas: Use a comma when a
clause, or text, after the comma pertains to the first section but can
not stand as it's own complete sentence. Example: This day has been a
laundry list of chores, dishes, sweeping, taking care of baby.

A semi-colon connects two clauses where the text following the
semi-colon can stand as a complete sentence. Example: This day has been
a laundry list of chores; it's been full of dishes, sweeping and taking
care of baby.

Sincerely,
Bridgit Kuenning-Pollpeter
Read my blog at:
http://blogs.livewellnebraska.com/author/bpollpeter/
 
"History is not what happened; history is what was written down."
The Expected One- Kathleen McGowan

Message: 9
Date: Thu, 8 Nov 2012 09:12:53 -0500
From: "Chris Kuell" <ckuell at comcast.net>
To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
Subject: Re: [stylist] Eve's Writing prompt
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Hi Eve,

Your piece is filled with passion, which is always good. I actually
agree 
with what Bridgit wrote, that I'd like to see some quotes to illustrate
the 
claims you mentioned, but that somewhat depends on what your purpose in 
writing is. When I read a piece like this, the professional writer in me

thinks -- this would make a good op-ed piece, and I want some quotes and

references to back it up. But, for a blog post, what you wrote is fine.

One thing I think you could work on is semi-colons. You use a lot of
them, 
too many in my opinion. For example, you wrote:
If we wish to be led by a Bishop; we need to go to church, not become
one. I'd suggest using a comma there instead of a semi-colon, or use a
period and 
make it 2 sentences:
If we wish to be led by a Bishop, we need to go to church. Not become
one.

I think this is a powerful sentence, and you may even want to end the
piece 
with it. Nice job.