[stylist] Learning Project Writing Plays

Mon Nov 26 01:45:14 UTC 2012

Hi all,

Thank you for you comments. I will be working on the editing of the script once I finish a more complete draft. Eve, I'm doing this more in the style of Tenesse 
Williams. His style is similar to how I am writing this play.

Chris, I haven't seen the play you have mentioned. But I'm starting to volunteer and get involved with the Lesbian, Gay, Bisexual, Transgender, queer, 
Questioning, and intersex (LGBTQQI) community. It's quite tragic how many commit suicide, bullied, and killed. I've become friends with some of the people in 
this community, and I'm trying to put their issues into this play. I'm trying to make a statement through this play that it's okay to be who we are, and expressing 
who we are is so important.t It is like being a family when I am with the LGBTQQI community, so I am doing this to help raise awareness.

Thanks,

Keitei

On Sun 11/25/12  7:39 AM , Eve Sanchez 3rdeyeonly at gmail.com sent:
> Keitei, Thanks for resending me the script. I like where it is going and
> Ibelieve with more time to work out the details and to create a full
> playwith perhaps a few acts, you are going to have something wonderful.
> Well,this is not a critique. This is a learning project and I question the
> beginning. It seems that it is a combination of scene setting and then
> narrative of what the audience sees during performance. Is this correct?
> Iwas thinking it should be scene setting alone and not mention what the
> audience sees as that becomes too 'story telling'. Not sure on what is
> proper though. Perhaps if you are unsure you could check this with your
> instructor for clarification. I would appreciate it. Another thing is
> thatwhen writing a story or paper of pretty much any sense you introduce
> thecharacters and what-have-yous as a formal description and then fall
> intothe more comfortable tag from then on. Boy, I am not making myself
> clearhere. What I mean is for example... General Motors becomes GM. Thomas
> Edison becomes Edison or Thomas. Queen Elizabeth II becomes the queen. In
> ascript though, I do not think this rule applies. The actor reading the
> script knows his character's name and so that should not change. The
> audience does not read the script, or at least it is not written for
> them.I think if the character is listed as Anchorman 1 he should stay as
> Anchorman 1. If you want him to be Frank he should start out that way.
> Perhaps you could tag him as Anchorman Frank. It would make it much
> clearerto choose one or another and should not be both. I have never written a
> script, but have read many when I used to perform in the theater, so if
> Iam wrong on this I apologise, but I do not think so. About the story, I
> have a question. Do you live SLC? Would they talk like this on the
> localnews? I come from Idaho Falls, which is way more extreme than SLC by
> farand they at least try to be discrete on their prejudices dictated by
> thechurch. Not always successfully, but...  Well, I really encourage you
> tokeep working on this and create something that will be important. Thank
> youfor taking on such a subject and thank you for taking on this project.
> ;)Eve
> 
> On Thu, Nov 22, 2012 at 7:37 PM, Aine Kelly-Costello  con.net.nz>wrote:
> > Hi Keitei,
> >
> > I really like this script , good job! I agree
> with Chris though-would like> to see what happens! Just one minor thing I
> noticed: the description of> what Katharine is doing sometimes jumps into the
> past tense, accidentally,> it seems.  I am referring to this
> part:> ?
> > Katharine walked in circles around the small
> living room.  It looked like> pacing.  Finally, she takes a seat on the couch.
>  The microwave dings and> Katharine jumps up.  She rushed to the microwave
> and opens the door.>  Inside the microwave sat a mug of
> tea.>
> > ?
> >
> > Good work though!
> >
> >
> > Aine
> >
> >
> > ----- Original Message -----
> > From: "Chris Kuell"  cast.net> To:  nk.net>, "Writer's Division Mailing List"  stylist at nf
> bnet.org> Date sent: Thu, 22 Nov 2012 19:05:09
> -0500> Subject: Re: [stylist] Learning Project Writing
> Plays>
> >  Hey Keitei,
> >
> > Thanks for sharing your script so far.  My first
> comment is that I was> disappointed it ended! I was getting into it,
> and yet it isn't finished.>  It
> > strikes me as a solid start, and obviously
> covers a deep, important topic.>  I
> > did see a couple of minor typos, and I wondered
> why, in act 2, Angel needed> to toss the rock at Catharine's window, since
> Angel had already called on> the phone.  My other comment is that I'd like to
> see more character> development, although if this is a 5 or even 10
> minute play, there's not a> lot of time for that.  You might want to make it
> longer.>
> > On a side note, yet related to your play and the
> youtube video you sent,> have you ever seen 'Dog Sees God'? I went to see
> it last spring at our> community theatre, and it was probably the most
> powerful show I've ever> seen.  At our theatre, they ended with the
> actors reading bios of young> people who have committed suicide over being
> bullied about their sexual> orientation.  I don't think a single person in
> the audience or on stage> wasn't crying when they finished.  It's a
> tragedy that quite simply has to> stop.
> >
> > Thanks for sharing,
> >
> > chris
> >
> >
> >
> >
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