[stylist] For One Night-story

[Donna Hill]

It is a neat word, even if I don't know what it actually looks like.
Donna 

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I want to thank you all for your feedback.  I really appreciate it!  I
would've replied sooner however I've been busy.
As for using cerulean, I used google to check it.  Also, I've read some
writings where they've described people's eye color as, "cerulean eyes." 

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I think words should be cut if necessary. Whether fiction or nonfiction, you
need to be concise and clear. I come from a school of thought that stresses
strong nouns and verbs and not using adverbs often. So I think
the use of cerulean    is great. Saying blue could mean a variety of
hues, but cerulean is a specific that's clear and will allow a reader to
visualize a specific hue of blue, at least for most readers.

Bridgit
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Date: Sun, 14 Apr 2013 19:16:56 -0400
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Hi Lori,
I agree with you about phrases like "It was." I would also put "There is"
and it's variations in the same category. As a journalist, when I encounter
things like that, I immediately think of them as  easy ways to reduce the
word count. In fiction, I think you can get away with them in scenes where
you want a relaxed feel, but if you're trying to build or sustain suspense
and tension, it's a no-no, in my view.

Thanks for pointing out that cerulean  is a form of blue. I had a vague
memory of that, but was going to Google it. It's one of those words that I
think can conjure some connection with grandeur even if a person doesn't
have a light-induced understanding of color. 

Also, I'm sorry if I  should have known this, but I had no idea that you
were an artist. What's your favorite medium? Donna 


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