[stylist] Comments on One night story

[Bridgit Pollpeter]

Donna,

I didn't mean a more descriptive sex scene, I just simply think a more
creative way can be found to describe what Tessa did. More creative
language can be used, but this doesn't mean a more descriptive scene.

I actually don't like a lot of gratuitous sex scenes especially since
it's usually very cliché. I think this is my biggest problem with sex
scenes, the cliché language and descriptions. And is it always
necessary? I'm not against it and have written sex scenes myself, but I
try to avoid the cliché, cheesy descriptions usually relied upon.

Bridgit


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Date: Tue, 16 Apr 2013 18:30:45 -0400
From: "Donna Hill" <penatwork at epix.net>
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Subject: Re: [stylist] Comments on For One night-story
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Tessa,
I disagree with Bridgit about the sex scenes. I was just reading a John
Lescroart novel, and I noticed that he builds up the scene to where you
know that's what's going to happen and then cuts away. I think some
people are not comfortable with graphic sex scenes, and the way you did
it gets the point across without being overly dramatic. There are those
who enjoy writing and reading more descriptive sex scenes, but if you
aren't one of them, don't think you're alone.

As for the paragraph breaks, that's one thing I do agree with Bridgit
about. My suggestion is to get books either through Bookshare or in
Braille and think about the way authors breaktheir work up into
paragraphs. If you're on Bookshare, you can use the FS reader, which
comes with Jaws to access the text, and pick through it like you would
your own documents.  
Donna