[stylist] poetry question

[Barbara Hammel]

Vejas, I think, as others have suggested, that you may want to look into 
doing this as a prose poem.  You could also make it an open verse poem by 
evening out the syllables in each line.  I did see a few words that you 
could add or take out, depending on the line.  But I won't give you 
specifics at this time.  You look it over and see if you can keep the 
content while evening out syllable count.
Barbara




Writing free verse is like playing tennis with the net down.--Robert Frost
-----Original Message----- 
From: vejas
Sent: Saturday, April 20, 2013 5:01 PM
To: stylist at nfbnet.org
Subject: [stylist] poetry question

Hi all,
I've been so busy lately (AP euro test in a month) that I haven't
really had a chance to do much on the list.
I normally don't write poetry, but we wrote poems yesterday for
my creative writing club in high school.  I shared my poem to the
club members, who were all very enthusiastic about it.  They want
me to submit it to our high-school literary magazine.
But like I said, I really don't write much poetry, so I would
really like some advice on how to make my poem good.  I feel like
it lacks flow and formatting and it is not really considered a
poem.
Any suggesttions welcome.  I've attached it, and will paste it at
the bottom of this e-mail.
Thanks so much.
Vejas
I Speak for the Silent
by Vejas Vasiliauskas
I speak for the silent.
I come to tell you that you are not alone.
There are many other people out there like you.
For the millions of you who think that no one will care,
There are millions more who will want to hear your story and
listen to you.
Speak up, and your life will change for the better.
Yes, I know it is hard, but you can do it.
I know, because I did.
I used to be one of these silent people,
so  I know you can do it!
You are NOT alone.






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