[stylist] Prompt- when we dance together
Robert Leslie Newman
newmanrl at cox.net
Sat Feb 16 00:55:27 UTC 2013
Lynda
I sure get the sense of the open road on a two wheeled, fast bike. And my
maleness truly reacts to (respectfully speaking) to the lines - The
throbbing steel tank between my legs - Wild rock-n-roll women in masquerade
And I believe I get and appreciate the symbolism of the line- I raise the
first of my icy cold left hand
Thanks (yea Biker Chick)
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From: stylist [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of Bridgit
Pollpeter
Sent: Friday, February 15, 2013 1:04 PM
To: stylist at nfbnet.org
Subject: [stylist] Prompt- when we dance together
Lynda,
I'm not familiar with the song you use, but I'm also not a big country fan,
though I think older country like this is better than most country today,
smile.
This poem is vivid and it really came to life in my mind.
I like your word choice which adds to the evocativeness of the poem. And I
like the pacing too.
You have some great lines, and I related to the subject matter, which I'm
sure we all can.
My favorite lines are:
We spiral downward - a bizarre fairyland tale.
Wild rock-n-roll women in masquerade
Neon surges through our veins.
on the rough pavement of the dance floor I raise the fist of my icy cold
left hand Reach out to catch the storm.
And oh, you did such a good job at incorporating your lyrics. Like Chris,
it's very organic to the poem. I would have never guessed if I didn't know.
Bridgit
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Date: Thu, 14 Feb 2013 14:06:28 -0500
From: "Lynda Lambert" <llambert at zoominternet.net>
To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
Subject: Re: [stylist] Prompt_When we dance together
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Whew! My poem is now ready!
First line is from a song - as required.
Some other images from the same song appear in the poem, too.
I have copied it below, and attached it as well.
Here we go!
"When We Dance Together"
When we dance together, my world's in disguise
Concealed behind black leather jackets
Dense fringes snap in the wind
We spiral downward - a bizarre fairyland tale.
Concealed behind black leather jackets
I hunker down against the brisk mountain air
We spiral downward - a bizarre fairyland tale
Wild rock-n-roll women in masquerade.
I hunker down against the brisk mountain air
The throbbing steel tank between my legs
Wild rock-n-roll women in masquerade
Neon surges through our veins.
The throbbing steel tank between my legs
with the rumble of Cobra Drags
Neon surges through our veins.
Lean into the slant wind that blows us around.
with the rumble of Cobra Drags
We ride side by side, with stars in our eyes
Lean into the slant wind that blows us around.
I raise the fist of my icy cold left hand
We ride side by side, with stars in our eyes,
on the rough pavement of the dance floor
I raise the fist of my icy cold left hand
Reach out to catch the storm.
On the rough pavement of the dance floor
Laughing with the painful gusts of rain
Reach out to catch the storm
Dancing together in disguise.
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