[stylist] Tunnel Vision

[Chris Kuell]

Donna,

You are a competent writer, and this piece reads well. Like all of us on 
this list, there are certainly parts I can relate to. For example: Then, my 
heart was drilling a hole through my chest. My last step hadn't
landed; it was sinking through thin air.
Been there, done that, and you capture the momentary feeling so well. Why 
isn't my foot on solid ground? As for your recovery, racing down the stairs, 
I have no idea how you pulled that off. Whatever your methodology, I could 
use some lessons.

As far as recommendations to improve the piece, I'd have to agree that the 
ending needs work. You might consider changing the title to something like 
'Adventures in the Tunnel', since the piece is largely a recap of some of 
your mishaps. You might end a little more philosophically. Tunnels, by their 
very nature, are limiting. They impede ones' progress to move in a variety 
of directions. However, once given the proper tools, we can chip away at 
those limitations. We can create new tunnels that go in a multitude of 
places we never thought we could go. That sort of thing.

Now, wasn't it nice to take a break from editing your novel and get creative 
for a few hours?

chris