[stylist] Sharing a pantoum Azure Skies

Mon Mar 25 15:49:57 UTC 2013

I also thought that was a good poem.  The soaring azure imagery contrasted with night and sorrow.  I may have to rty one myself when the spirit moves me.

Shawn

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From: stylist [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of Barbara Hammel
Sent: Monday, March 25, 2013 11:26 AM
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I have a Myrna folder, too.
Azure is one of those words I work in to poems on occasion.  My other favorite sky color is cerulean.
So, Lynda, what is the difference between azure and cerulean?  And I thought cyan was the color that is an even mix of blue and green, somewhere between aqua and turquoise.
Barbara

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. -- Carl Sandburg -----Original Message-----
From: Lynda Lambert
Sent: Monday, March 25, 2013 8:54 AM
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Subject: Re: [stylist] Sharing a pantoum Azure Skies

Here is my thoughts after reading this excellent poem:

This Pantoum is so rich in mythological imagery. It is ethereal.

Your choice of the two noun, Zephyr, combined with Breeze,

gives the feeling of lightness,fluidity, and fragility.

And then you pull into this combination the color that is  historically mythological - Azure!

Together the two words denote anything that is very fine and light, and even magical in nature.

The Zephyr is such a fragile kind of breeze - in ancient times it was known as the "West Wind."

Azure always makes us bring out thoughts to the heights, upwards, to the sky, and even the atmosphere. It is a delicate blue, yet rich in value. At times it is called "Alice Blue."

In early times, painters would not use Azure as a pigment because they believed it to be unstable, but in time, it was realized that it was indeed a stable color and after that we began to see it brought into paintings.
Typically, it would be used in paintings of sacred events - it denoted royalty, and holiness.

I think your poem gives allusions to these things so well, and particularly it works because of the Pantoum form. I noticed immediately that you used the traditional Pantoum form, using end rhymes. You did it so well that the poem does not have the kind of rigidity that often comes via a rhymed ending. Your rhyming end words retain the lightness you created from the first line.

In photography and on the web, Azure is a color that  is also called Cyan.

Often this color is called light sky blue, baby blue, and silver lake blue.
I have a feeling that this color will be found in the art of just about any civilization, and it will be used with the depiction of things from Nature.

I suspect you could do an entire research project on the topic of "Azure Skies."  It is that BIG in scope, I think.

OH, the other thing that was strange as I read this poem, is that I had read

"brush" as "blush" without realizing it.  So I went back once I realized I had mis-read the poem, and I purposely read it as "blush" in those places - and WOW, again, the idea of painting and the movement of the artist's hand was so clear to me.

This is a very "painterly poem."

Thanks for sharing.

I started a Myrna folder, so I can keep some of your gems - this one is in it!

Lynda

My Blog:  http://www.walkingbyinnervision.blogspot.com
My Website:  http://lyndalambert.com

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From: <KajunCutie926 at aol.com>
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Sent: Sunday, March 24, 2013 10:28 PM
Subject: [stylist] Sharing a pantoum Azure Skies

> Okay here is my last pantoum which I believe was written about three 
> months
> ago...  I also attached it as  a rich text file...
>
> Azure Skies
>
> That I could soar across  azure skies
> To leave my thoughts upon zephyr's breeze
> And ask no quarter  or compromise
> When night time comes and darkness bleeds
>
> To leave my  thoughts upon zephyr's breeze
> Brush stroked dreams, watercolor hued
> When  night time comes and darkness bleeds
> Upon the echo of my soul  renewed
>
> Brush stroked dreams, watercolor hued
> They fill the heart  where grief had grown
> Upon the echo of my soul renewed
> The truth of these  thoughts unknown
>
> They fill the heart where grief had grown
> And ask no  quarter or compromise
> The truth of these thoughts unknown
> That I could  soar across azure skies
>
>
> nfbnet.org/kajuncutie926%40aol.com
>
>

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