[stylist] Sharing a pantoum Azure Skies

[Jacqueline Williams]

Myrna,
This is a beautiful pantoum. The thoughts and the imagery are magnified by
the form you chose. The form can also be used to hammer down unpleasant
thoughts such as spousal abuse, because of the repetitive quality of the
form, and the repetitive quality of the cycle of violence. I have such a one
in my manuscript, "Run, Quail, Run." My feeling is that this group likes
beautiful ethereal subjects and like my own critique group, does not like to
hear the other side of the beauty coin.
May I call yours a beautiful mind?
It is definitely inspirational. I loved Lynda's critique, so in depth, and
giving an appreciation of the deeper meanings of color.
Jackie

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Subject: [stylist] Sharing a pantoum Azure Skies

Okay here is my last pantoum which I believe was written about three months 
 ago...  I also attached it as  a rich text file...

Azure Skies

That I could soar across  azure skies
To leave my thoughts upon zephyr's breeze
And ask no quarter  or compromise
When night time comes and darkness bleeds

To leave my  thoughts upon zephyr's breeze
Brush stroked dreams, watercolor hued
When  night time comes and darkness bleeds
Upon the echo of my soul  renewed

Brush stroked dreams, watercolor hued
They fill the heart  where grief had grown
Upon the echo of my soul renewed
The truth of these  thoughts unknown

They fill the heart where grief had grown
And ask no  quarter or compromise
The truth of these thoughts unknown
That I could  soar across azure skies
 
 
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