[stylist] new poem

[Barbara Hammel]

The ending surprised me.  I was thinking all the way through, "this is weird 
to write about a person."
I like the poem.
One thing, though.  The first stanza flowed along nicely but then you tried 
to fit too many words in a line and it got clunky.
Barbara



Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. -- Carl Sandburg
-----Original Message----- 
From: Kyle woodard
Sent: Tuesday, March 26, 2013 8:21 PM
To: Writer's Division Mailing List
Subject: [stylist] new poem

Hello, here is a new poem I just wrote that I wanted to share and get some
feedback on, if you wouldn't mind. It is tentatively called treasure i
would appreciate any feedback or thoughts you have on this poem. Later Kyle
Woodard


I am silent when others are loud,
I am humble when others are proud.
I sit in silence most of the time,
However I am no voiceless mime.

I talk in the silence when no one is there to listen,
I cry in the dark where no one can see my eyes glisten.
I listen to all who smile, cheer worry, cry and doubt,
I give wisdom and comfort to those who seek me out.

So who am I this selfless wonder?
So what am I some precious jewel or pirates plunder?
To what name do I give myself?
I am nothing more than an old dusty book on the shelf


-- 
Wallace Kyle Woodard IV
(512) 992-6346
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