[stylist] new poem

Fri Mar 29 16:42:42 UTC 2013

Kyle, I agree with Jackie on your poem about the book - I don't see it as a 
metaphor at all as it is not subtle enough for that and it is not an implied 
comparison -

The other thought I have on your dark poem  is that it can so easeily be 
turnned into a Haloween spoof - I found it to be full of humor and little 
messages of warning, much like warnings we would give children around 
trick-or-treat time.

Lynda

----- Original Message ----- 
From: "Jacqueline Williams" <jackieleepoet at cox.net>
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Sent: Friday, March 29, 2013 12:30 PM
Subject: Re: [stylist] new poem

> Kyle,
> I would say that, because you are talking as the old dusty book on the
> shelf, it is personification. But perhaps that form can also be a 
> metaphor.
> I can print it and take it to poetry class and get another opinion.
> While I am at it, I loved your "dark" poem. I will have to read it again,
> but it had good rhymes, unusual thoughts, and was a bit of a challenge to
> put it altogether into a single warning and challenge about "Hell."
> I am not sure I liked the last two lines, but, I gave it just a cursory 
> read
> and have saved it.
> Jackie
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: stylist [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of Kyle 
> woodard
> Sent: Thursday, March 28, 2013 6:16 PM
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> Subject: Re: [stylist] new poem
>
> Thank you all for your comments and opinions as for your comment about
> personification Jackie. in order to muddy the waters a bit I will ask am I
> using personification or is the ending a metaphor for something else? I am
> not completely sure myself this poem kind of wrote itself later, Kyle
>
>
> On Thu, Mar 28, 2013 at 4:25 PM, Jacqueline Williams
> <jackieleepoet at cox.net>wrote:
>
>> Kyle,
>> This poem uses "personification," which has been looked upon as  a 
>> "no-no"
>> by poets for some time. I do not agree. Perhaps because I am guilty of
>> using
>> it myself. I love to get inside of inanimate objects and think of
> something
>> alive and feeling.
>> The other comment is that I do not think that you have two long and
>> unwieldy
>> lines. I think that if you made an attachment, this would be resolved. It
>> seems to me that those two lines have a natural separation point, and 
>> your
>> e-mail used its own formatting. A problem that we all have, except, it
>> appears, Barbara's. I do not know how she sends hers, but you might ask.
>> If that does not give you the right line length and rhythm and rhyme, I
>> agree with the other comments.
>> Jackie
>>
>> -----Original Message-----
>> From: stylist [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of Kyle
>> woodard
>> Sent: Tuesday, March 26, 2013 6:22 PM
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>> Subject: [stylist] new poem
>>
>> Hello, here is a new poem I just wrote that I wanted to share and get 
>> some
>> feedback on, if you wouldn't mind. It is tentatively called treasure i
>> would appreciate any feedback or thoughts you have on this poem. Later
> Kyle
>> Woodard
>>
>>
>> I am silent when others are loud,
>> I am humble when others are proud.
>> I sit in silence most of the time,
>> However I am no voiceless mime.
>>
>> I talk in the silence when no one is there to listen,
>> I cry in the dark where no one can see my eyes glisten.
>> I listen to all who smile, cheer worry, cry and doubt,
>> I give wisdom and comfort to those who seek me out.
>>
>> So who am I this selfless wonder?
>> So what am I some precious jewel or pirates plunder?
>> To what name do I give myself?
>> I am nothing more than an old dusty book on the shelf
>>
>>
>> --
>> Wallace Kyle Woodard IV
>> (512) 992-6346
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