[stylist] new poem

[Jacqueline Williams]

Kyle,
I would say that, because you are talking as the old dusty book on the
shelf, it is personification. But perhaps that form can also be a metaphor.
I can print it and take it to poetry class and get another opinion.
While I am at it, I loved your "dark" poem. I will have to read it again,
but it had good rhymes, unusual thoughts, and was a bit of a challenge to
put it altogether into a single warning and challenge about "Hell."
I am not sure I liked the last two lines, but, I gave it just a cursory read
and have saved it.
Jackie 

-----Original Message-----
From: stylist [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of Kyle woodard
Sent: Thursday, March 28, 2013 6:16 PM
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Subject: Re: [stylist] new poem

Thank you all for your comments and opinions as for your comment about
personification Jackie. in order to muddy the waters a bit I will ask am I
using personification or is the ending a metaphor for something else? I am
not completely sure myself this poem kind of wrote itself later, Kyle


On Thu, Mar 28, 2013 at 4:25 PM, Jacqueline Williams
<jackieleepoet at cox.net>wrote:

> Kyle,
> This poem uses "personification," which has been looked upon as  a "no-no"
> by poets for some time. I do not agree. Perhaps because I am guilty of
> using
> it myself. I love to get inside of inanimate objects and think of
something
> alive and feeling.
> The other comment is that I do not think that you have two long and
> unwieldy
> lines. I think that if you made an attachment, this would be resolved. It
> seems to me that those two lines have a natural separation point, and your
> e-mail used its own formatting. A problem that we all have, except, it
> appears, Barbara's. I do not know how she sends hers, but you might ask.
> If that does not give you the right line length and rhythm and rhyme, I
> agree with the other comments.
> Jackie
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: stylist [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of Kyle
> woodard
> Sent: Tuesday, March 26, 2013 6:22 PM
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> Subject: [stylist] new poem
>
> Hello, here is a new poem I just wrote that I wanted to share and get some
> feedback on, if you wouldn't mind. It is tentatively called treasure i
> would appreciate any feedback or thoughts you have on this poem. Later
Kyle
> Woodard
>
>
> I am silent when others are loud,
> I am humble when others are proud.
> I sit in silence most of the time,
> However I am no voiceless mime.
>
> I talk in the silence when no one is there to listen,
> I cry in the dark where no one can see my eyes glisten.
> I listen to all who smile, cheer worry, cry and doubt,
> I give wisdom and comfort to those who seek me out.
>
> So who am I this selfless wonder?
> So what am I some precious jewel or pirates plunder?
> To what name do I give myself?
> I am nothing more than an old dusty book on the shelf
>
>
> --
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