[stylist] Flash fiction

[Atty Rose]

That is great. I won't be there though. LOL
I'd love for you to let me know how it goes off list though!

----- Original Message ----- 
From: "Bridgit Pollpeter" <bpollpeter at hotmail.com>
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Sent: Friday, April 04, 2014 6:21 PM
Subject: Re: [stylist] Flash fiction


> Hey Atty,
>
> The NFB Nebraska convention, in Omaha this year, will have a health and
> wellness seminar. Thought you might be interested.
>
> Bridgit
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: stylist [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of Atty Rose
> Sent: Friday, April 04, 2014 11:19 AM
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> Subject: Re: [stylist] Flash fiction
>
>
> Thank you so much! I haven't turned back to it yet but I have saved
> everyones comments and will make sure I fix the errors.
>
> I'm working up my blind wellness stuff and am very excited about it
> also!
>
> Take care all,
> me
>
> If you would like to be friends on facebook I am Atty Rose.
>
> ----- Original Message ----- 
> From: "Applebutter Hill" <applebutterhill at gmail.com>
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> Sent: Friday, April 04, 2014 10:55 AM
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>
>
>> Hi Atty,
>> Edgy and quirky with a message. I like it. I'm still thinking about
>> e-rights.
>>
>> There are a few typing issues that you might want to fix -- extra
>> spaces between words, capital when not called for, but nothing else
>> jumped out and bit me.
>>
>> 1. There's a Space between the quotation mark and first word:Block
>> quote " E-Fritz is now part of the family," Desman said imitating
>> their father. "It will teach you kids responsibility." He waved the
>> scoop controller. "Dad installed the olfactory plug-in, so now you
>> Block quote end
>>
>> 2. It's entrance - a-n-c-e not e
>> Block quote
>> entrence with her body, blue eyes blazing.
>> Block quote end
>>
>> 3. Exttra space after with
>> Block quote
>> Karly turned red with  fury, "You're a stinky
>> Block quote end
>>
>> 4. Are you sure you don't want a comma after "Oh?
>> And, did you mean to drop the 'd from "I'd" -- "I' kiss your beautiful
>> lips
>> ...?"
>> Also, I'd make "And sent it into a full sentence. I'm guessing you
> left
>> this
>> as a fragment because adding it to the previous sentence would have
> made
>> it
>> a bit run-on . I like the two previous sentences the way they are, so
> the
>> only thing for it would be to add a beginning, such as, "before she
> could
>> stop him, he sent it." or "Eyes glued to her face for a reaction, he
> sent
>> it."
>>
>> Block quote
>> Desman pressed return v-mail and made smooching sounds into the
>> camera. He fluttered his lashes and said in a soft breathy voice, "Oh
>> e-Anna, I' kiss your beautiful lips, if you had them." And sent it.
>> Block quote end HTH,
>> Donna
>>
>>
>> -----Original Message-----
>> From: stylist [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of Atty
>> Rose
>> Sent: Thursday, March 27, 2014 12:50 PM
>> To: Writer's Division Mailing List
>> Subject: [stylist] Flash fiction
>>
>> Hi all, here is my try at flash fiction. I am going to submit it to
>> Daily Science fiction. I belong to their list and enjoy the little
>> scenes they post.
>>
>> I hope the attachment works.
>>
>> Atty
>>
>>
>>
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