[stylist] stylist Digest, Vol 120, Issue 2
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Today's Topics:
1. Re: Flash fiction (Applebutter Hill)
2. Re: Flash fiction (Atty Rose)
3. Re: Flash fiction (Bridgit Pollpeter)
4. Re: Flash fiction (Atty Rose)
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Message: 1
Date: Fri, 4 Apr 2014 11:55:37 -0400
From: Applebutter Hill <applebutterhill at gmail.com>
To: "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
Subject: Re: [stylist] Flash fiction
Message-ID: <4DD38405D2E94104A9E92275CC08745A at OwnerHP>
Hi Atty,
Edgy and quirky with a message. I like it. I'm still thinking about
e-rights.
There are a few typing issues that you might want to fix -- extra spaces
between words, capital when not called for, but nothing else jumped out and
bit me.
1. There's a Space between the quotation mark and first word:Block quote
" E-Fritz is now part of the family," Desman said imitating their father.
"It will teach you kids responsibility." He waved the scoop controller.
"Dad
installed the olfactory plug-in, so now you
Block quote end
2. It's entrance - a-n-c-e not e
Block quote
entrence with her body, blue eyes blazing.
Block quote end
3. Exttra space after with
Block quote
Karly turned red with fury, "You're a stinky
Block quote end
4. Are you sure you don't want a comma after "Oh?
And, did you mean to drop the 'd from "I'd" -- "I' kiss your beautiful
lips
...?"
Also, I'd make "And sent it into a full sentence. I'm guessing you left
this
as a fragment because adding it to the previous sentence would have made it
a bit run-on . I like the two previous sentences the way they are, so the
only thing for it would be to add a beginning, such as, "before she could
stop him, he sent it." or "Eyes glued to her face for a reaction, he sent
it."
Block quote
Desman pressed return v-mail and made smooching sounds into the camera. He
fluttered his lashes and said in a soft breathy voice, "Oh e-Anna, I' kiss
your beautiful lips, if you had them." And sent it.
Block quote end
HTH,
Donna
-----Original Message-----
From: stylist [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of Atty Rose
Sent: Thursday, March 27, 2014 12:50 PM
To: Writer's Division Mailing List
Subject: [stylist] Flash fiction
Hi all, here is my try at flash fiction. I am going to submit it to Daily
Science fiction. I belong to their list and enjoy the little scenes they
post.
I hope the attachment works.
Atty
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Message: 2
Date: Fri, 4 Apr 2014 11:18:50 -0500
From: "Atty Rose" <attyrose at cox.net>
To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
Subject: Re: [stylist] Flash fiction
Message-ID: <FA969BB4CF8A483297239D876B11CE8C at attyf6de8e04fd>
Content-Type: text/plain; format=flowed; charset="iso-8859-1";
reply-type=original
Thank you so much! I haven't turned back to it yet but I have saved
everyones comments and will make sure I fix the errors.
I'm working up my blind wellness stuff and am very excited about it also!
Take care all,
me
If you would like to be friends on facebook I am Atty Rose.
----- Original Message -----
From: "Applebutter Hill" <applebutterhill at gmail.com>
To: "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
Sent: Friday, April 04, 2014 10:55 AM
Subject: Re: [stylist] Flash fiction
> Hi Atty,
> Edgy and quirky with a message. I like it. I'm still thinking about
> e-rights.
>
> There are a few typing issues that you might want to fix -- extra spaces
> between words, capital when not called for, but nothing else jumped out
> and
> bit me.
>
> 1. There's a Space between the quotation mark and first word:Block quote
> " E-Fritz is now part of the family," Desman said imitating their father.
> "It will teach you kids responsibility." He waved the scoop controller.
> "Dad
> installed the olfactory plug-in, so now you
> Block quote end
>
> 2. It's entrance - a-n-c-e not e
> Block quote
> entrence with her body, blue eyes blazing.
> Block quote end
>
> 3. Exttra space after with
> Block quote
> Karly turned red with fury, "You're a stinky
> Block quote end
>
> 4. Are you sure you don't want a comma after "Oh?
> And, did you mean to drop the 'd from "I'd" -- "I' kiss your beautiful
> lips
> ...?"
> Also, I'd make "And sent it into a full sentence. I'm guessing you left
> this
> as a fragment because adding it to the previous sentence would have made
> it
> a bit run-on . I like the two previous sentences the way they are, so the
> only thing for it would be to add a beginning, such as, "before she
could
> stop him, he sent it." or "Eyes glued to her face for a reaction, he sent
> it."
>
> Block quote
> Desman pressed return v-mail and made smooching sounds into the camera.
He
> fluttered his lashes and said in a soft breathy voice, "Oh e-Anna, I'
kiss
> your beautiful lips, if you had them." And sent it.
> Block quote end
> HTH,
> Donna
>
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: stylist [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of Atty Rose
> Sent: Thursday, March 27, 2014 12:50 PM
> To: Writer's Division Mailing List
> Subject: [stylist] Flash fiction
>
> Hi all, here is my try at flash fiction. I am going to submit it to Daily
> Science fiction. I belong to their list and enjoy the little scenes they
> post.
>
> I hope the attachment works.
>
> Atty
>
>
>
> _______________________________________________
> Writers Division web site
> http://writers.nfb.org/
> stylist mailing list
> stylist at nfbnet.org
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Message: 3
Date: Fri, 4 Apr 2014 18:21:27 -0500
From: Bridgit Pollpeter <bpollpeter at hotmail.com>
To: "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
Subject: Re: [stylist] Flash fiction
Message-ID: <BLU0-SMTP17268F2D82C5A717F097901C46F0 at phx.gbl>
Content-Type: text/plain; charset="us-ascii"
Hey Atty,
The NFB Nebraska convention, in Omaha this year, will have a health and
wellness seminar. Thought you might be interested.
Bridgit
-----Original Message-----
From: stylist [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of Atty Rose
Sent: Friday, April 04, 2014 11:19 AM
To: Writer's Division Mailing List
Subject: Re: [stylist] Flash fiction
Thank you so much! I haven't turned back to it yet but I have saved
everyones comments and will make sure I fix the errors.
I'm working up my blind wellness stuff and am very excited about it
also!
Take care all,
me
If you would like to be friends on facebook I am Atty Rose.
----- Original Message -----
From: "Applebutter Hill" <applebutterhill at gmail.com>
To: "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
Sent: Friday, April 04, 2014 10:55 AM
Subject: Re: [stylist] Flash fiction
> Hi Atty,
> Edgy and quirky with a message. I like it. I'm still thinking about
> e-rights.
>
> There are a few typing issues that you might want to fix -- extra
> spaces between words, capital when not called for, but nothing else
> jumped out and bit me.
>
> 1. There's a Space between the quotation mark and first word:Block
> quote " E-Fritz is now part of the family," Desman said imitating
> their father. "It will teach you kids responsibility." He waved the
> scoop controller. "Dad installed the olfactory plug-in, so now you
> Block quote end
>
> 2. It's entrance - a-n-c-e not e
> Block quote
> entrence with her body, blue eyes blazing.
> Block quote end
>
> 3. Exttra space after with
> Block quote
> Karly turned red with fury, "You're a stinky
> Block quote end
>
> 4. Are you sure you don't want a comma after "Oh?
> And, did you mean to drop the 'd from "I'd" -- "I' kiss your beautiful
> lips
> ...?"
> Also, I'd make "And sent it into a full sentence. I'm guessing you
left
> this
> as a fragment because adding it to the previous sentence would have
made
> it
> a bit run-on . I like the two previous sentences the way they are, so
the
> only thing for it would be to add a beginning, such as, "before she
could
> stop him, he sent it." or "Eyes glued to her face for a reaction, he
sent
> it."
>
> Block quote
> Desman pressed return v-mail and made smooching sounds into the
> camera. He fluttered his lashes and said in a soft breathy voice, "Oh
> e-Anna, I' kiss your beautiful lips, if you had them." And sent it.
> Block quote end HTH,
> Donna
>
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: stylist [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of Atty
> Rose
> Sent: Thursday, March 27, 2014 12:50 PM
> To: Writer's Division Mailing List
> Subject: [stylist] Flash fiction
>
> Hi all, here is my try at flash fiction. I am going to submit it to
> Daily Science fiction. I belong to their list and enjoy the little
> scenes they post.
>
> I hope the attachment works.
>
> Atty
>
>
>
> _______________________________________________
> Writers Division web site
> http://writers.nfb.org/
> stylist mailing list
> stylist at nfbnet.org
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> To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for
> stylist:
>
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Message: 4
Date: Fri, 4 Apr 2014 21:52:27 -0500
From: "Atty Rose" <attyrose at cox.net>
To: "Writer's Division Mailing List" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
Subject: Re: [stylist] Flash fiction
Message-ID: <7A2EE46056B640F69FB9EEEC3BACFE70 at attyf6de8e04fd>
Content-Type: text/plain; format=flowed; charset="iso-8859-1";
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That is great. I won't be there though. LOL
I'd love for you to let me know how it goes off list though!
----- Original Message -----
From: "Bridgit Pollpeter" <bpollpeter at hotmail.com>
To: "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
Sent: Friday, April 04, 2014 6:21 PM
Subject: Re: [stylist] Flash fiction
> Hey Atty,
>
> The NFB Nebraska convention, in Omaha this year, will have a health and
> wellness seminar. Thought you might be interested.
>
> Bridgit
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: stylist [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of Atty Rose
> Sent: Friday, April 04, 2014 11:19 AM
> To: Writer's Division Mailing List
> Subject: Re: [stylist] Flash fiction
>
>
> Thank you so much! I haven't turned back to it yet but I have saved
> everyones comments and will make sure I fix the errors.
>
> I'm working up my blind wellness stuff and am very excited about it
> also!
>
> Take care all,
> me
>
> If you would like to be friends on facebook I am Atty Rose.
>
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "Applebutter Hill" <applebutterhill at gmail.com>
> To: "'Writer's Division Mailing List'" <stylist at nfbnet.org>
> Sent: Friday, April 04, 2014 10:55 AM
> Subject: Re: [stylist] Flash fiction
>
>
>> Hi Atty,
>> Edgy and quirky with a message. I like it. I'm still thinking about
>> e-rights.
>>
>> There are a few typing issues that you might want to fix -- extra
>> spaces between words, capital when not called for, but nothing else
>> jumped out and bit me.
>>
>> 1. There's a Space between the quotation mark and first word:Block
>> quote " E-Fritz is now part of the family," Desman said imitating
>> their father. "It will teach you kids responsibility." He waved the
>> scoop controller. "Dad installed the olfactory plug-in, so now you
>> Block quote end
>>
>> 2. It's entrance - a-n-c-e not e
>> Block quote
>> entrence with her body, blue eyes blazing.
>> Block quote end
>>
>> 3. Exttra space after with
>> Block quote
>> Karly turned red with fury, "You're a stinky
>> Block quote end
>>
>> 4. Are you sure you don't want a comma after "Oh?
>> And, did you mean to drop the 'd from "I'd" -- "I' kiss your beautiful
>> lips
>> ...?"
>> Also, I'd make "And sent it into a full sentence. I'm guessing you
> left
>> this
>> as a fragment because adding it to the previous sentence would have
> made
>> it
>> a bit run-on . I like the two previous sentences the way they are, so
> the
>> only thing for it would be to add a beginning, such as, "before she
> could
>> stop him, he sent it." or "Eyes glued to her face for a reaction, he
> sent
>> it."
>>
>> Block quote
>> Desman pressed return v-mail and made smooching sounds into the
>> camera. He fluttered his lashes and said in a soft breathy voice, "Oh
>> e-Anna, I' kiss your beautiful lips, if you had them." And sent it.
>> Block quote end HTH,
>> Donna
>>
>>
>> -----Original Message-----
>> From: stylist [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of Atty
>> Rose
>> Sent: Thursday, March 27, 2014 12:50 PM
>> To: Writer's Division Mailing List
>> Subject: [stylist] Flash fiction
>>
>> Hi all, here is my try at flash fiction. I am going to submit it to
>> Daily Science fiction. I belong to their list and enjoy the little
>> scenes they post.
>>
>> I hope the attachment works.
>>
>> Atty
>>
>>
>>
>> _______________________________________________
>> Writers Division web site
>> http://writers.nfb.org/
>> stylist mailing list
>> stylist at nfbnet.org
>> http://nfbnet.org/mailman/listinfo/stylist_nfbnet.org
>> To unsubscribe, change your list options or get your account info for
>> stylist:
>>
> http://nfbnet.org/mailman/options/stylist_nfbnet.org/attyrose%40cox.net
>
>
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>
>
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