[stylist] Christmas poem

[Barbara HAMMEL]

Not trying to speak for Shawn, Chris, but the poem may read fine without that line but then he'd probably need to kill the line about the god that hates fags. But mostly I wonder if the thought was just a personal reflection. If we all had to be politically correct, so much of what gets posted here and elsewhere should be disregarded. He didn't speak ill of anyone, he was just musing.
Barbara

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> On Dec 23, 2014, at 08:25, Chris Kuell via stylist <stylist at nfbnet.org> wrote:
> 
> Hey Shawn,
> 
> We're probably around the same age, and my feelings about Christmas and our
> house are in sync. So I related to your poem. Two things did jump out at me,
> though. Is the line: The word "gay" still has its hallowed meaning here. --
> really necessary?  It took me out of the mood of the poem, and I think it
> reads fine without it. Secondly, there's the line where you say 'summons
> forth' twice in the same line, which struck me as repetitious. It  might be
> what you were going for, but the editor in me wants to change one.
> 
> Merry Christmas to you and your family, and thanks for sharing.
> 
> Chris
> 
> 
> 
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