[stylist] suggestions on this short story

[Bridgit Pollpeter]

Vejas,

Don't have time to read it right now but will get to it before end of
weekend. Two things that pop up to mind before reading though, why use
of female perspective? And was assignment specific to romantic love or
just love in general? If love of any kind, why write about romantic love
if that's not your experience? Plutonic love has its depths and passions
too. Okay, will send actual comments on writing later.

Bridgit

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From: stylist [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of Vejas
Sent: Saturday, February 01, 2014 2:35 PM
To: stylist at nfbnet.org
Subject: [stylist] suggestions on this short story


Hi all,
I am writing a story for class about love.  I would really like 
suggesttions on it.
I have never been in a relationship, so don't know how good my 
descriptions are.  Also I really don't like my ending-so I'd 
really like some suggesttions.
Also note that although this is a third-person narrative, this is 
largely written using the girl's thoughts.
I have to turn it in in 10 days, so there's time.
Thanks.
Vejas