[stylist] Bridgit - untitled

[Bridgit Pollpeter]

Chris,

Thanks. I actually have always had a terrible sense of smell, so I don't
often comment about smells, grin.

I posted this so I had something to contribute, but I really have no
clue what its intent is or where to go with it, if I even do more with
it. I just wanted a sample of something that wasn't completely terrible
to share. We shall see if I can whip up something new this weekend.

Bridgit

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From: stylist [mailto:stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org] On Behalf Of Chris
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Sent: Friday, March 14, 2014 9:58 AM
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Subject: Re: [stylist] Bridgit - untitled


Hey Bridgit,

Firstly, thanks for your critique of my Becky piece. I probably won't do

anything more with it, but you never know.

I enjoyed your submission here, although I agree it needs more. I feel
like 
an autumn leaf in a windstorm--I've been tossed here and there, and I
want 
to know where I'll end up. Your wording is poetic and almost lyrical,
and 
this is an enjoyable read. I'd like a para or two on smell, since I
think 
you left that out. When I think of babies, I always remember the smell
of 
them after a bath, all cleaned and freshly powdered. It brings me back
to my 
own babyhood, and there's nothing else like it in the world. And taste.
Is 
tequila unique in it's visual appeal? No--it's character lies in its one
of 
a kind taste. And all pasta looks the same, but have you ever had mushy,

overdone pasta? Versus slightly underdone, el dente pasta? Texture, we
live 
for texture. Be it the paint on the walls, my driveways blacktop versus
my 
neighbors (hers is much smoother), and so on.

I have an idea of how I might end it, but I think you should write more,
try 
to recapture the muse that helped you write what you have, and see, I
mean 
feel,  where it takes you.Smile.

chris
 


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