[stylist] low glucose, la toilet, bad romance

[William L Houts]

HI Chris,

I know "True Romance" isn't for everyone.  There's the "Bad" language 
thing, and the fact that it relies on memory of a particular film to 
some extent, and so on.  I don't really get how it's too long, as it 
seems to me to be about the same length of my other work.  But you're 
the customer and you read it that way, and I respect that.

As for "Antoinette", the title may just be too Clever Hands, and as 
you're the second reader who has commented unfavorably about it, I'm 
very likely going to change.  I had thought, when I wrote the thing, 
since it's about poverty in a global context, that "Antoinette" would 
evoke Marie Antoinette and her daffy "Let them eat cake!".  But it all 
seems too too and very very at this point.



--Bill










On 3/18/2014 7:18 AM, Chris Kuell wrote:
> Hey Bridgit-- you have obviously spent a lot of time on your insulin 
> reaction piece. The lyrical language is totally your imprint, and you 
> do a good job portraying how you felt that day. Although I'm also a 
> type I diabetic, it's a little hard for me to relate, because my blood 
> sugar lows are quite different. I tend to feel sluggish and stupid, as 
> if I'm drunk and carrying a hundred pound backpack. But your 
> description is vivid, and frightening, which is exactly what you were 
> going for.
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> Bill - I enjoyed your poem, Antoinette, although I don't understand 
> where the title comes from. However, the meaning comes through loud 
> and clear to me. It's kind of how I started to accept my blindness 
> after it hit years ago. This sucks, but it could be a lot worse. Nice 
> job.
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> To be honest, True Romance was a little long for me. I get it, meaning 
> I can fill in the blanks, see the people, we all know their stories. 
> But for me, it doesn't evoke the same emotion as reading/watching 'The 
> Godfather' or 'The Sopranos' or  'Good Fellas'. I do appreciate you 
> sharing it, and keep on writing.
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