[stylist] BP Sharing writing

[Chris Kuell via stylist]

Hi Bridgit,

In the following passage you use 'a figure' two times, conveying a single 
person or entity. But then you use 'they' and 'their', which I understand 
because you don't know the gender or even species, but still I find the 
plural form offputting. It's probably just me, but I thought I'd mention it. 
You might consider using 'it' or 'the figure' or 'the person' or something 
that suits you.

Twenty-feet in front of me, a figure strides
towards me. My heart pounds and I glance around, nervous, looking for an
escape. This is just a dream, so I can wake myself. I've done it before.
I do it every time I have this dream.

The figure approaches. They are wearing a cloak with a hood that hides
their face.

I do understand your use of color, and you do tell us early on that 'this 
world gleems with brilliance' and 'technicolor' and too radiant to be real' 
and iridescent'. It just jumped out to me that your descriptions focused on 
color, which is fine, since it's a dream world that you are creating.

As to where you are going with it--I guess I'll have to wait and see.

chris