[stylist] Tanka

[Jackie Williams]

Shawn,
Do Tanka not have titles like Haiku?
Your first line is a bit confusing to me, with the word Wonderout and it
makes six syllables. I love the rest of it, and will think about it as I
imagine looking into the heavens at the stars.

Jackie Lee

Time is the school in which we learn.
Time is the fire in which we burn.
Delmore Schwartz	 


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Shawn D via stylist
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Subject: [stylist] Tanka

Here's one (since we're trading tankas.

Wonderout father God
who also is my mother
I shall give you praise.
You gorge the great burning stars,
And give rest to little ones.

Shawn
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