[stylist] The most famous cinquain

[Barbara Hammel]

Maybe because yours is a bit funny?  If not funny, very light.  Hers was 
putting one in a peaceful mood with the first two and then the last one just 
knocks you for a loop because it REALLY got somber.
Yours does have the same feel in the sense that the first two are 
consumable? -- is that even a word?  -- and the latter is, of course, a 
person.  I'm not really sure why it would always be rejected.
Barbara




Writing free verse is like playing tennis with the net down.--Robert Frost
-----Original Message----- 
From: Barbara Hammel via stylist
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Funny, because I think yours is better than hers.
Barbara




Writing free verse is like playing tennis with the net down.--Robert Frost
-----Original Message----- 
From: Jackie Williams via stylist
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Subject: [stylist] The most famous cinquain

Adelaide Crapsey is known for bringing the form to the U.S. Here is her most
famous one.

"There be
three silent things:
the falling snow. the hour
before the dawn.the mouth of one
just dead."


Below is my own parody of this, submitted many times
and always rejected. I always put "after Adelaide Crapsey."

Any suggestions?


Flopsey, Mopsey, and Crapsey


There be
three thrilling things:
macaroni and cheese.
Manhattans, straight up if you please.
and thee.


Jackie Lee

Time is the school in which we learn.
Time is the fire in which we burn.
Delmore Schwartz

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