[stylist] The most famous cinquain
Jackie Williams
jackieleepoet at cox.net
Tue Aug 11 15:11:43 UTC 2015
Barbara,
Thanks for your critique of both of these. I suspect that the popularity of
Crapsey's cinquain is because of the last two syllables, the shock of them,
and the ultimate truth of what she says. It is powerful and I probably
should not have written a parody of it. That might be something that would
offend a judge. Of course, I think the title of mine is the funny part of
it.
Jackie Lee
Time is the school in which we learn.
Time is the fire in which we burn.
Delmore Schwartz
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Maybe because yours is a bit funny? If not funny, very light. Hers was
putting one in a peaceful mood with the first two and then the last one just
knocks you for a loop because it REALLY got somber.
Yours does have the same feel in the sense that the first two are
consumable? -- is that even a word? -- and the latter is, of course, a
person. I'm not really sure why it would always be rejected.
Barbara
Writing free verse is like playing tennis with the net down.--Robert Frost
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Funny, because I think yours is better than hers.
Barbara
Writing free verse is like playing tennis with the net down.--Robert Frost
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Adelaide Crapsey is known for bringing the form to the U.S. Here is her most
famous one.
"There be
three silent things:
the falling snow. the hour
before the dawn. the mouth of one
just dead."
Below is my own parody of this, submitted many times
and always rejected. I always put "after Adelaide Crapsey."
Any suggestions?
Flopsey, Mopsey, and Crapsey
There be
three thrilling things:
macaroni and cheese.
Manhattans, straight up if you please.
and thee.
Jackie Lee
Time is the school in which we learn.
Time is the fire in which we burn.
Delmore Schwartz
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