[stylist] My turn to get creative. What do you think?

[Barbara Hammel]

I also saw a few spelling errors.  One other thing is that most of your 
lines are short so the long ones, since they come randomly seem to throw off 
the rhythm.
Barbara




Writing free verse is like playing tennis with the net down.--Robert Frost
-----Original Message----- 
From: Pagan Tree via stylist
Sent: Thursday, February 26, 2015 4:46 AM
To: Kendra Schafer ; Writers' Division Mailing List
Subject: Re: [stylist] My turn to get creative. What do you think?

Kendra, It is nice. In the line "And love bird songs
greets us." I would take out one of the plurals though.
I am rarely on here, so may have missed your introduction. Could you tell
me a bit about yourself?
Eve Sanchez

On Wed, Feb 25, 2015 at 11:08 PM, Kendra Schafer via stylist <
stylist at nfbnet.org> wrote:

> Hi all!
> After reading that last bit of creative writing, I thought that I'd join
> in and write something myself. What do you all think? It's below here.
> Spring Time is on its Way
> Spring is calling,
> Sun is rising,
> Wind is blowing from the east.
> As flowers grow,
> Mother Earth opens her wonderful show.
> As the sky grows warmer,
> Eagles fly higher,
> As they use the thermals,
> To create their own rolar coasters.
> And all around us is a lot of energy and love.
> As we Rome,
> New life meets us,
> And love bird songs greets us.
> Signs of life like this,
> Let's us know that spring is coming.
>
> What do you all think?
> Kendra
>
>
> Sent from my iPhone
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