[stylist] SAS City (a sonnet for Cary NC)

[Jacobson, Shawn D]

Jackie

Thanks for looking at the poem (and for your comments).  I did it as a sonnet because it seemed a cool idea at the time and I wanted to try something new for me.  Better than being blocked any old day of the week (smile),

Shawn

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Shawn,
This was a difficult effort to put so much technical information into such a strict form. My inclination is for you not  to call it a sonnet , and just try to smooth it out a bit. For instance, the line, " And so SAS city due respect we'll pay," is an inversion used so that you can hold the rhyme scheme. One or two more lines have only 9 syllables, and the iambic  meter is not consistently produced in each line. This does not make it a bad poem, only that the content might be shown off better in a more freeform of poetry I learned something. I thought SAS was just a brand of shoe produced in Texas, and known nationwide for it's comfort, or alternatively, an SASE is an envelope you include when you want to get an answer to something! I enjoyed learning the new terminology, and it gave a bit of insight into your profession My guess is that your effort at doing this poem as a sonnet will give you a giant leap forward in the craft of poetry. Only by trying new forms do we increase our knowledge and skill at the demands of the myriad forms of poetry. So congratulations.. 

Jackie Lee

Time is the school in which we learn.
Time is the fire in which we burn.
Delmore Schwartz	 

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I've not tried this form before (so it may be uneven).

Cary NC is where the SAS institute is located; SAS is a statistical processing package that has grown and grown and is now kind of all things to all people.

So I hope you like my nerdy little sonnet.

Shawn

SAS City
We carved you from the Carolina woods
as city whose bright streets are paved with code A Mecca in the southland wrought by nerds a hold place, a wonder to behold.
Though not set on a hill you shine afar
where ever statistical work is done.
We think about the wonder that you are
whenever true regression lines are run.
And so SAS city due respect we'll pay
our statements will be semicolon crowned.
We'll order statements in the proper way.
Our jobs with Proc Step features will abound.
Our analysis reports stem from you
and we will know our procedures were true.

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