[stylist] Poem - "Drinking" - Second Draft

[William L Houts]

Good Morning, Chris,

I always look forward to your comments,  and I thank you for your keen 
eye this morning.  First of all, red wine and a Red Wine with a Red 
Robin burger sound absolutely divine to me right now.  It's surely worth 
my noting that all alcohol is necessarily fermented at some point, but 
it still seems to me worthwhile, in this poem anyway, to make a 
distinction between wine and beer and strong liquors like whiskey and 
bourbon, although I can't quite say why. Anyway, I'm glad you like the 
poem, and am gratified that it's mostly passed your fierce discernment.

Oh yeah, and thank you for pointing out the spacing thing.  I really 
should start using Spellchecker, although something in me rebels, LOL.

--Bill


On 6/16/2015 6:24 AM, Chris Kuell via stylist wrote:
> Hey Bill,
>
> While I'll never pass on a beer with a nice hamburger, I've become fond of a
> nice red wine to compliment the burger as well. It's probably an acquired
> taste, but worth it, in my mind.
>
> Anyway, on to your poem. I like it, and while I'm not perfectly clear on all
> your phrasing, I certainly get the gist of your efforts. And personally, if
> I don't have to puzzle over parts of a poem, it's almost like a let down.
> This had a nice balance to me, and again--I enjoyed it.
>
> For the record, beer and wine are both fermented. In fact, all alcoholic
> beverages are made with the initial step of fermenting natural sugars into
> ethanol.I don't think you need to change the line in your poem, but be
> prepared for some blowback from people with nothing better to do.
>
> It's water Icrave, clear and iced, like melting star, - need a space between
> I and crave
>
> Nice job,
>
> Chris
>
>   
>
>
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