[stylist] Poem - "Pool" - Second Draft

[William L Houts]

Hi Chris,


That does seem like a profitable idea, but it doesn't have much to do 
with my personal experience of water.  On the other hand, I do live in 
Washington State, about five blocks from the Puget Sound. So water 
really is inescapable.  But while I don't have much personal experience 
with dams and the like, I have lots to do with the simple fact of rain.  
So I think the third poem in the cycle will be about precipitation:  
rain, snow, sleet. It's very flattering, though, that you've continued 
to devote a little headspace to the poem after reading it earlier. Much 
appreciated, sir.


--Bill




On 6/25/2015 12:22 PM, Chris Kuell via stylist wrote:
> Hey Bill,
>
> As I've moved through my day, I've been thinking about your poem, and more
> specifically, your idea for a tricycle, if you will, of water poems. And I
> think your third poem in the cycle should deal with the power of water.
> Sure, we need it for hydration, and it's awesome for cooling off in the
> summer heat. But it can also be devastating. Tsunamis, hurricanes, floods,
> the absolute immensity of power in a place like Niagara falls--it's pretty
> awesome.
>
> Something for you to think about.
>
> Chris
>   
>
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> Houts via stylist
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>
> Oh yeah, Chris:
>
> The use of "ape" in that line is meant to suggest that without the scorchers
> of summer, the season would mimic the other months and so deprive us of
> summer's particular charms.  But now I need to read and reread that line to
> determine if the sense I intended is simply more obscure than can be borne
> by a short little pleasantry about summer.
> Geez, Bill, you're not trying to rewrite "Prufrock" here, are you? LOL
>
>
> --Bill
>
>
>
>
>
>
> On 6/25/2015 5:49 AM, Chris Kuell via stylist wrote:
>> Hi Bill,
>>
>> Don't you wish we had these blow up pools when we were younger? What a
>> great, and relatively inexpensive way to cool off in the summer. I'm
>> thinking of installing a sump pump and fashioning a fountain in ours.
>>
>> Anyway, as for your poem, I like it, but not as much as some of your
>> other works. As stated above, I do appreciate the summer cool, and I
>> really like the image of shaking off like a baboon. I can't really
>> wrap my head around the use of the word 'ape' here:
>>
>> would ape the other months and by them blandness cry.
>>
>> Hunh??
>>
>> And to me, it seems as though you are trying too hard to be clever
>> with your first line:
>> Twelve feet by three our pool:deep
>>
>> Why not:
>> Our pool is twelve feet long, three deep
>>
>> Which is clearer to me, and still ends on deep.
>>
>> Just my thoughts. Thanks for sharing.
>>
>> Chris
>>
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