[stylist] submission for stylist

[Chris Kuell]

Hi Estelle,

Bridgit gave you an excellent editorial response, so I won't go through this
with that kind of detail. I will say that I think you have a great story
idea here, and I hope you run with it. I might suggest changing the title to
simply--Santa Gives up Christmas, as it's shorter, simpler, and leaves the
reader wondering--why? Secondly, I suggest you use either Mrs. Claus, or
spell out Misses, and not use the abbreviated form. It's just better
grammatically.

Chris


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Sent: Saturday, November 14, 2015 4:03 PM
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Subject: [stylist] submission for stylist

Hello,
  We are new to stylist and to publishing, but are excited about getting
into the business and putting some children's stories with  braille, large
print and some tactile pictures out "there" for the blind and sighted to
share. We have already "published" a coloring book:  "I am a Crayon. What
Color am I?"  and have had a good response - at least for beginners! John
Batron who is the author, seems to have a never ending supply of ideas and
stories. His 5 grandchildren are certainly part of his inspiration!
  So, we thought we would send you a little bit of one of his stories to get
some comments and suggestions. We have tried to listen in on some of the
phone conferences. We would also like to know if we could get a list and the
code numbers to listen to the recordings of the ones we miss.
  Well, here goes:

Santa Gives Up Christmas Because He is Going Blind
  by John Batron

  Christmas has just passed and once again Santa noticed that getting around
the world was  more difficult each year.  This year, if not for his
reindeer, he truly believed that he would not have found his way back to the
North Pole.  With their great guidance, they all were able to get home
safely.
  Mrs. Claus noticed that something was wrong.  Santa shook his head and
said, "No."
  But later,  he told her he was going to make an appointment with the eye
doctor.  In a few days, he and the Mrs. were in the eye doctor's office.
  The doctor gave Santa a thorough examination and told them that there was
nothing that could be done, that he was starting to get old and that he was
losing his vision.
  "What should I do?" said Santa.
  The doctor told him that he should go home and let the Mrs. take care of
him from now on.
  Santa said, "What about my toy shop and all the children?"
  The doctor said, "You'll just have to give that all up."
  Santa jumped to his feet and yelled, "Never!"  He stormed out, the visit
was over!

  Well I guess that's just a tickler, but we look forward to any comments.  
  Blessings and thanks for all you do,  Estelle Shukert

    



 		 	   		  
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