[stylist] quads times two chapters one and two

[Barbara HAMMEL]

Yeah, I'll probably have to expand these chapters to actually be the past but I was planning just to have this telling to have our major glimpse into their pasts. There were a lot of names but most will probably not even play into the story, and if they do, I'll make sure it is understood who they are.
LOL! Now I have no clue where to take this story so it may be a bit before more comes.
Barbara
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> On Sep 29, 2015, at 08:34, Chris Kuell via stylist <stylist at nfbnet.org> wrote:
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> Hi Barbara,
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> This is a good start. I noticed several little errors, but you'll find those when you go back to edit. My primary thought is that there are a lot of names in these chapters, which can be tricky to keep straight--at least for me. And secondly, there is a lot of telling, so review 'show don't tell' as you continue writing.
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> Chris
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