[stylist] Short Piece, "Inner Rebellion"

[Tessa]

Vejas It's an interesting snippit but as been said by others this is not really a rebarious teen or a worst nightmare, it's just someone learning to deal with life, not liking it mind you but learning none the less.
If you want to make him into a nightmare scenerio you might have him smiling and thinking about how he was going to put x-lax or some other unpleasant product into the food being served to the people who are going with his father on the business trip. Or how he'd like to use the knife he's washing to do terrible things to his family. That would create a character that your readers know will snap and are probably going to read on to see just what pushes him over the final edge and what will he do.
It looks like something you could really expand on which ever character you develop.
Tessa


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> > Vasiliauskas via stylist
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> > Cc: Vejas Vasiliauskas <alpineimagination at gmail.com>
> > Subject: [stylist] Short Piece, "Inner Rebellion"
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> > Hi,
> > This is not really a short story-much shorter than that-and although the
> > main character and family situation are different to mine, I was somewhat
> > similar.  Just curious if anyone could relate.
> > Inner Rebellion
> > by Vejas Vasiliauskas
> > My name is Clive.  I'm 17 years old and I'm your worst nightmare.
> > Well, I could be.
> > I'm not the typical teen rebel.  I'm not the kind who smokes, parties and
> > takes drugs every night.  The fight is inside of me, but just be lucky I
> > keep my mouth shut.
> > They ask me to wash the dishes, and I'll do it with a smile.  In reality,
> > however, I'm really annoyed: I'd rather be reading my book, or going
> online,
> > or doing anything.  As I continue on with the dishes, mentally cursing
> their
> > very existence, my smile grows wider.  I don't want to make it difficult
> for
> > them.  When they see what I've done they smile and say, "You're awevers,
> > Clive-thanks." Well, the praise was worth it.
> > Yesterday our Disneyworld trip for next week got cancelled, because my dad
> > needed the money to fund a business trip he was taking.  My younger
> sisters,
> > 10 and 8, cried and cried and cried.  
> > I was probably more heartbroken than even they were, having never been
> there
> > in 17 years.  But instead, with the biggest smile I could muster, I said,
> > "It's no problem, we'll have other years to do it."
> > You're so adaptable, they said.
> > This has been my life all the time.  Just be glad I will never give you an
> > ounce of trouble.  You decide: worst nightmare?
> > 
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