[stylist] Short Piece, "Inner Rebellion"

[Bridgit Kuenning-Pollpeter]

Vejas,

Nice little snipet of a story. I like the angsty tone.

I'm not sure I would consider this a rebellious teen at all, and definitely
not a worse nightmare, grin. I suspect most teens feel this way. In fact,
most adults feel this way. To me, this demonstrates a mature teen instead of
a bad one. They realize responsibility, and that sometimes you have to do
things in life you don't want too, but you can't always complain and whine
and be argumentative.

Now, supressing emotions can lead to an outburst. When feelings boil over,
usually you can explode. So perhaps if you move forward with this story,
your main character can go through a transformation by learning how to
express emotions and feelings in a healthy way. Maybe a blow-up can happen,
and Clive learns that he has to balance being responsible and neutral with
sharing feelings and thoughts. Just a suggestion.

Bridgit

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Subject: [stylist] Short Piece, "Inner Rebellion"

Hi,
This is not really a short story-much shorter than that-and although the
main character and family situation are different to mine, I was somewhat
similar.  Just curious if anyone could relate.
Inner Rebellion
by Vejas Vasiliauskas
My name is Clive.  I'm 17 years old and I'm your worst nightmare.
Well, I could be.
I'm not the typical teen rebel.  I'm not the kind who smokes, parties and
takes drugs every night.  The fight is inside of me, but just be lucky I
keep my mouth shut.
They ask me to wash the dishes, and I'll do it with a smile.  In reality,
however, I'm really annoyed: I'd rather be reading my book, or going online,
or doing anything.  As I continue on with the dishes, mentally cursing their
very existence, my smile grows wider.  I don't want to make it difficult for
them.  When they see what I've done they smile and say, "You're awevers,
Clive-thanks." Well, the praise was worth it.
Yesterday our Disneyworld trip for next week got cancelled, because my dad
needed the money to fund a business trip he was taking.  My younger sisters,
10 and 8, cried and cried and cried.  
I was probably more heartbroken than even they were, having never been there
in 17 years.  But instead, with the biggest smile I could muster, I said,
"It's no problem, we'll have other years to do it."
You're so adaptable, they said.
This has been my life all the time.  Just be glad I will never give you an
ounce of trouble.  You decide: worst nightmare?

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