[stylist] Short Piece, "Inner Rebellion"

Mon Oct 17 14:26:55 UTC 2016

I don't know that I would constitute periodic freak-outs as rebellion
though. I think we all act-out at times, kids and adults alike, but I don't
think it has to be indicative of rebellious behavior. At least not extreme
rebellion. Doing one thing and thinking another is just human nature. I
can't tell you how many times I'm in conversation with family, and I
completely disagree with what they are saying, but I keep my opinions and
thoughts to myself because I know it will just create tension and arguments.
Then later, my opinions gush forth with my husband because I can't keep my
mouth shut any longer, LOL! So I think this is very common.

But I think Clive has potential as a character. And when you infuse real
bits and pieces of yourself in a character, you usually end up creating
fleshed-out, three-dimensional characters.

Bridgit

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Subject: Re: [stylist] Short Piece, "Inner Rebellion"

Oh yes. I have definitely snapped before. Probably more than Clive, LOL. I
have, like Clive, put on an amazingly fake smile/fake front because I
absolutely cannot stand complainers when there is no control over a
situation,  so I would be a hypocrite if I was like that myself.

I still think the feelings are similar though, if Clive rebelled inside
himself or lashed out then it's the same idea just expressed in a different
way. 
Vejas  

> On Oct 17, 2016, at 06:38, Bridgit Kuenning-Pollpeter via stylist
<stylist at nfbnet.org> wrote:
> 
> Vejas,
> 
> Nice little snipet of a story. I like the angsty tone.
> 
> I'm not sure I would consider this a rebellious teen at all, and
definitely
> not a worse nightmare, grin. I suspect most teens feel this way. In fact,
> most adults feel this way. To me, this demonstrates a mature teen instead
of
> a bad one. They realize responsibility, and that sometimes you have to do
> things in life you don't want too, but you can't always complain and whine
> and be argumentative.
> 
> Now, supressing emotions can lead to an outburst. When feelings boil over,
> usually you can explode. So perhaps if you move forward with this story,
> your main character can go through a transformation by learning how to
> express emotions and feelings in a healthy way. Maybe a blow-up can
happen,
> and Clive learns that he has to balance being responsible and neutral with
> sharing feelings and thoughts. Just a suggestion.
> 
> Bridgit
> 
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> Vasiliauskas via stylist
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> To: stylist at nfbnet.org
> Cc: Vejas Vasiliauskas <alpineimagination at gmail.com>
> Subject: [stylist] Short Piece, "Inner Rebellion"
> 
> Hi,
> This is not really a short story-much shorter than that-and although the
> main character and family situation are different to mine, I was somewhat
> similar.  Just curious if anyone could relate.
> Inner Rebellion
> by Vejas Vasiliauskas
> My name is Clive.  I'm 17 years old and I'm your worst nightmare.
> Well, I could be.
> I'm not the typical teen rebel.  I'm not the kind who smokes, parties and
> takes drugs every night.  The fight is inside of me, but just be lucky I
> keep my mouth shut.
> They ask me to wash the dishes, and I'll do it with a smile.  In reality,
> however, I'm really annoyed: I'd rather be reading my book, or going
online,
> or doing anything.  As I continue on with the dishes, mentally cursing
their
> very existence, my smile grows wider.  I don't want to make it difficult
for
> them.  When they see what I've done they smile and say, "You're awevers,
> Clive-thanks." Well, the praise was worth it.
> Yesterday our Disneyworld trip for next week got cancelled, because my dad
> needed the money to fund a business trip he was taking.  My younger
sisters,
> 10 and 8, cried and cried and cried.  
> I was probably more heartbroken than even they were, having never been
there
> in 17 years.  But instead, with the biggest smile I could muster, I said,
> "It's no problem, we'll have other years to do it."
> You're so adaptable, they said.
> This has been my life all the time.  Just be glad I will never give you an
> ounce of trouble.  You decide: worst nightmare?
> 
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