[stylist] Poem, "Where I'm From"

[Barbara HAMMEL]

There are two things that I would say. One is I'd divide this into two stanzas — but maybe you did because you know how this loves to play with spacing of things. If you didn't, I'd divided it after blue.
The other is the word "cheap". I'd find a synonym for it that flows much nicer because all your other words are softer. 

Barbara Hammel

> On Sep 12, 2016, at 02:07, Vejas Vasiliauskas via stylist <stylist at nfbnet.org> wrote:
> 
> Hi All,
> I know I haven't posted any work in a while and am not usually a poet but...
> I have been assigned a poem titled "Where I'm From", and can write anything as long as it's longer than a haiku.
> This just flowed.  This is what I consider the ideal world.
> Where I'm From
> by Vejas Vasiliauskas
> I come from a world of imagination.
> A world of dreamy souls, floating in fresh, luscious water.
> A world of birds, singing nonstop, with their cheery tunes.
> A world of books, from cheap paperbacks to glossy hardcover.
> A world where everything is of the most rich blue.
> So how did I end up here, in this life?
> How did I end up in a world of expectations, responsibilities, deadlines,
> A world of judgement, loneliness and difference?
> If you know, text me.
> 
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