[Stylist] feedback about punctuation in acrostic poem in progress

[Barbara HAMMEL]

Maybe it's just me but I think blood flow should be hyphenated and so should thorn crowned. I don't know if the former would technically be a properly hyphenated word but it looks too much like a verb without it.     Barbara Hammel

> On Mar 25, 2019, at 13:33, Jennifer Applegate via Stylist <stylist at nfbnet.org> wrote:
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> Hello all,
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> I would appreciate feedback about punctuation I employed in these lines.
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> Thank you,
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> Jennifer Applegate
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> Royal King of mankind dwelled among white flock, guided wise men by bright
> starlight to see Jesus swadeled near Mary and Joseph in House of Bread,
> faced them sleeping on hay for a bed
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> Yahweh burned bush when Moses stood barefoot on holy ground, killed
> Pharaoh's firstborn son to free oppressed Israelites, lighted night while
> they walked through wilderness
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> Anointed Son prayed to heavenly Father on Mount of Olives, sacrificed
> crimson blood flow from hands and feet nailed to Calvary's cross as He bowed
> thorn crowned head, paid fettered slaves' sin debts
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> Nourishing redeemer fed fishers of men daily bread, filled them with living
> water like an overflowing fountain, strengthened prisoners to lovingly serve
> suffering brethren multiplying fruitfulness
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