[Stylist] feedback about punctuation in acrostic poem in progress

[Ann Chiappetta]

Hi,
Please take this with a grain of salt, I am by no means an expert.

I think crimson blood flows from hands and feet is best. Hands and feet
implies a plural not a singular. It does not need to be hyphenated, either. 

As for first born, one could hyphenate or reverse and say born first and get
around it.

Generally, the less punctuation in a poem, the better. I like to use line
breaks instead of commas, if I can and rely on  mostly periods.
HTH
Annie


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Subject: Re: [Stylist] feedback about punctuation in acrostic poem in
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Maybe it's just me but I think blood flow should be hyphenated and so should
thorn crowned. I don't know if the former would technically be a properly
hyphenated word but it looks too much like a verb without it.     Barbara
Hammel

> On Mar 25, 2019, at 13:33, Jennifer Applegate via Stylist
<stylist at nfbnet.org> wrote:
> 
> Hello all,
> 
> I would appreciate feedback about punctuation I employed in these lines.
> 
> 
> 
> Thank you,
> 
> 
> 
> Jennifer Applegate
> 
> 
> 
> Royal King of mankind dwelled among white flock, guided wise men by 
> bright starlight to see Jesus swadeled near Mary and Joseph in House 
> of Bread, faced them sleeping on hay for a bed
> 
> Yahweh burned bush when Moses stood barefoot on holy ground, killed 
> Pharaoh's firstborn son to free oppressed Israelites, lighted night 
> while they walked through wilderness
> 
> Anointed Son prayed to heavenly Father on Mount of Olives, sacrificed 
> crimson blood flow from hands and feet nailed to Calvary's cross as He 
> bowed thorn crowned head, paid fettered slaves' sin debts
> 
> Nourishing redeemer fed fishers of men daily bread, filled them with 
> living water like an overflowing fountain, strengthened prisoners to 
> lovingly serve suffering brethren multiplying fruitfulness
> 
> 
> 
> 
> 
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