[Stylist] new poem, feed back appreciated

[Chris Kuell]

Hey Annie,

I tend to agree with Barbara's assessment. There are aspects of the cabin in
this piece, but my mind is drawn to the outhouse. Perhaps the cabin deserves
an outhouseless poem, and the dreaded outhouse deserves a poem of its own.

Happy Memorial Day.

Chris


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Hello all,

This is from a families of veterans writing workshop. I know it isn't about
soldiers, but it is about going to the family cabin, where my Dad and his
brothers all hunted, and, all of whom were veterans.

 

The Cabin

 

By Ann Chiappetta

 

Pine scents, the echo of bird calls, hollow

  sound of boots on the plywood floor. The squeak 

of the cabin door and crunch of footsteps moving toward the outhouse. Worry

competes with the urge -- will

there be spiders? Will someone hear a scream?

 

Keeping an eye on the spider in the corner, mouth-breathing 

to avoid the stink, it's finally done. Boots

make a hasty retreat from outhouse, clomp 

back into rustic safety. Dusk

edges into night followed by 

The soft swoosh of gas lanterns. Savory 

Camp food aromas waft from the kitchen, the pop

Of grease and spices compete for attention. iron stove 

and pump handle sink match the 

warped and slanted floor. The shotgun 

leans against the frame, a young 

shoulder bruised from its recoil.

 

Bears prowl at night. So much 

for the outhouse in the dark.

 

 

 




 

Ann Chiappetta, M.S.

Author & Consultant

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