[Stylist] The Oddysey of Homer One--second draft

[Shawn Jacobson]

Anne
Thanks for the input; I will take that under consideration.
I anticipate doing at least one more round of revision before sending this off.
Wish me luck.

Shawn Jacobson
sdj60259 at aol.com


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From: anniecms64 at gmail.com
To: 'Shawn Jacobson' <sdj60259 at aol.com>; 'Writers' Division Mailing List' <stylist at nfbnet.org>
Sent: Tue, Oct 5, 2021 7:47 pm
Subject: RE: [Stylist] The Oddysey of Homer One--second draft

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      From: Stylist <stylist-bounces at nfbnet.org> On Behalf Of Shawn Jacobson via Stylist
Sent: Tuesday, October 5, 2021 2:20 PM
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Subject: [Stylist] The Oddysey of Homer One--second draft  Dear Writer's division   I am writing to share with you the latest draft of my story, the Oddysey of Homer One.  My thanks to those of you who commented, on the first draft.  I think you will see most of your points address in this latest version.Shawn Jacobson
sdj60259 at aol.com
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