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[anniecms64 at gmail.com]

Hi-

Some thoughts about this story. Take it or leave it, of course.

*	If you are going Sci-Fi, go all in, don’t leave behind the  21st century nomenclature and colloquialisms  with 24th century adaptations.
*	Try new words or gender new phrases like non binary, the use of the word “they” instead of he/she. 
*	If these folks use brain boxes to replace  the visual cortex functions, perhaps you could write it in somewhere. For example, you mention sonar, this is another form of visual appreciation.
*	“probe” rather than “cane”?
*	Also, I am not clear on how  these folks receive and read contextual information, by haptic feedback? A tablet with refreshable etchings?  A scanner of some sort? How would a society raised without sight know how a camera or scanner works? 

 

Thanks for reading.

 

 

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Dear writers 

 

I am writing to share my latest story; I am doing so because I would like anyone who wants to take a crack at being a sensitivity reader to look at this to make sure I am not being stupid in describing how totally blind people would function in the futuristic setting that I am describing.  I know how I do things, but I am a high partial type person and I understand that someone totally blind would have different techniques/a different perspective on things.

 

Also, if anyone has stylistic suggestions, or finds typos/mispellings, please let me know.

 

Thanks in advance for your help.

Shawn Jacobson
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