[stylist] Rough draft of a poem.

[James H. "Jim" Canaday M.A. N6YR]

okay,
here's that word:
http://www.wordwebonline.com/search.pl?w=spume

spume is noun for foam or spray  as from the crashing waves of an 
ocean on the beach.
perhaps:
haunted by memories of their time together like sea spume

just an example.
jc

At 10:58 PM 10/3/2009, you wrote:
>Alan,
>rewrote with stronger language.  there's a seaman's word for the 
>ocean's spray and of course I couldn't put my mind on it else I 
>would have used it too.  I think it starts with sp...
>hope you don't mind, and of course you are quite free to hit the 
>delete button on this.
>jc
>
>
>Full Moon and High Tide
>
>The full moon held the beach of his life
>
>and tugged at the tide of his passions
>
>The flood tide--his need for her
>
>the weighty water--a million tears he had cried
>
>the thundering was his beating heart
>
>Crashing waves--his endless torment
>
>ebbing came upon a memory
>
>that for just a moment
>
>fate only conspires to keep them apart
>
>not to tear them asunder
>
>
>_______________________________________________
>
>
>At 03:51 PM 10/3/2009, you wrote:
>>Hi everyone,
>>I just wrote this poem, but I feel it is very rough and needs 
>>work.  Any thoughts and feedback are greatly appreciated.
>>
>>I am trying to convey emotional tumult in terms of a beach with a 
>>full moon.  This just seems weak to me, and could be stronger.  Hre it is:
>>Full Moon and High Tide
>>
>>
>>
>>The full moon shone on the beach of his life
>>
>>and pulled on the tides of his emotions
>>
>>
>>
>>The high tide of his love for her
>>
>>the water seeming like the million tears he had cried
>>
>>the thunderous sound his beating heart
>>
>>
>>
>>
>>
>>ebbing only came when he remembered
>>
>>that for the time being
>>
>>fate conspires to keep them apart
>>
>>
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