[stylist] DBG (chapter 4)

[helene ryles]

Hi Laura,
By a period, do you mean full stop?
I don't think lack of punctuation is a british thing, just that it
isn't really my strong point and neither is spelling but my spell
check picks out most of the misspelt words unless they have
alternative meanings. Which is probably why it didn't pick out
'lounge' as that's also a word.

Yes, Nazdonia is mostly desert lanscape.

Liza has one working eye. The other had a detached retina so she is
completely blind in that eye. Would I use eyes or eye in this case?

Ok, I'll use rescue then.

Thanks for going over it for me.

Helene

On 07/09/2009, LoriStay at aol.com <LoriStay at aol.com> wrote:
> If you say four a.m. (periods after each letter here), you don't need to
> mention it's morning, since a.m. means morning.   In this case, I'd leave
> the
> a.m. out and let the rest of the sentence define it.
>
> As the train arrived Stormy tried to make a lounge
> You probably mean a lunge   (l u n g e, rather than l o u n g e)
>
>  So I had to kidnap you
> instead...
> I'd probably say rescue rather than kidnap.   Kidnap has rather a bad
> connotation.   We've had a lot of children kidnapped in the states recently,
> and
> then found again.   Their kidnappers had sexually molested them.     Yes,
> rescue is definitely the word I'd use.
>
> question:   is this a desert environment?   That's the only place I'd
> expect to see trains and camels (as I have in the mid-east)
>  This was
> something I wasn't use to.
> the word should be used (u s e d) rather than use (u s e)
>
>  She would smile
> brightly for me but the smile hardly ever reached her eye.
> Do you mean eyes?   Or no, I guess she only has one, but the expression
> around the eyes has to do with facial muscles.   In fact, expressions are
> more
> easily seen around the mouth.
>
> Today she seemed more anxious then usual.  Something was definitely
> bothering her.
> The word is than (t h a n)
>
> I note you consistently leave out the punctuation at the end of the quotes.
>   I've read a lot of books written in Brittain, and that isn't something
> done.   I know I said I wouldn't mention it again, but I'm just wondering
> why
> you do it that way.
> Lori
>
> In a message dated 9/7/09 3:43:29 PM, dreamavdb at googlemail.com writes:
>
>
>> Liza got me out
>> of bed at about four am every morning
>>
>
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